What's Going On in Class?

Korea ^^ ha ha ha~~~

2005-07-21T08:36:00.000-07:00

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Ryan Kong(Classrooms)

2005-07-12T08:31:00.000-07:00

There are some differences and similarities between

Exam Review

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Study pages 106-108, 116-117, 118-119, 121, 126-128, 130-131, 133, 144

Your exam will be a comparison and contrast composition. You will need to be able to use the patterns we studied in unit 4. Review the sample compositions to get ideas for how to make interesting paragraphs.

Ryan Kong "I Am a Butterfly"

2005-07-11T19:47:00.000-07:00

I am a butterfly. It took me a long time to be a beautiful butterfly. Now I have gotten free. I can fly whenever I want and I can go wherever I want. Even though I am a weak thing, I am happy. I love floating in the air and like to suck sweet water from flowers. (Great!--If you can add a few more sentences to this, I will consider publishing it in NEW AND DIFFERENT VOICES lizine.blogspot.com!)

Kyung-Won, Lee [Home Work]

2005-07-11T00:22:00.000-07:00

This photo showed a butterfly rest quietly on a stem. I think this season is spring since it is flower season not yet. So a almost background color of the nature is green. I am felt peace of mind by this. Also, I can feel about free because a caterpillar might be changes into a butterfly. After it finished its rest, it will fly to the sky. The butterfly is worried by me. Before it finished its rest, it must take precautions against by a nature enemy, wart and bird. Maybe the butterfly will breed its small eggs. And then, it will die. This is ^natural circle. (very nice)

Ryan Kong "Wedding Anniversary Day"

2005-07-08T23:21:00.000-07:00

If you can look at this picture and could be given some information.(fragment) This is a picture of GunWoo’s family. As you can see in this picture, they traveled the East Europe in Russia last vacation. On their trip, they stayed at Mr. Pienkowski’s Bed and Breakfast Inn to take some rest. It was very fine day of late summer and their wedding anniversary. When his wife and boy, they both were looking ^green trees, flying birds and blue sky through out the window in their room, he gave her a bundle of flowers. a good start

Family in Russia - Renata

2005-07-08T08:55:00.000-07:00

The Simpson family is visiting a little city in Russia during the spring, because the spring is the favorite season of Ms. Simpson. Then, the Ms. Simpson’s boyfriend gave her beautiful flowers and invited her to dinner at the good restaurant near^ hotel, because^ is her birthday. But at that time they were seeing a funeral passing on the street(comma) and in this moment they were a little bit upset. a good start

Family (eunhyoungYoo)

2005-07-08T08:54:00.000-07:00

On July 4, 2005, it is not only Independence Day but also Mr. and Mrs. Smiths’ fifth Wedding Memorial day. So Mr. Smith, Mrs. Smith, and Jack who is their son are visiting in Seattle where they met first. They planned to visit in Seattle for 3days, because they want to remember their love.
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On July 4, 2005, it is not only Independence Day but also Mr. and Mrs. Smiths’ fifth wedding anniversary. So Mr. Smith, Mrs. Smith, and Jack who is their son are visiting in Seattle where they met at the first. They planned to visit in Seattle for 3days, because they want to remember their love. Mr. Smith gave her wife flowers for wedding anniversary. So Mrs. Smith was very happy.
The big parade of Independence Day is held. The family wants to see at the outside. But they couldn't. Because they were very tired from traveling. So they decided to see the parade through the window. Mr. Smith's son is very excited. Both Mr. Smith and Mrs. Smith are also very pleased.

In-class writing practice test(park, chul hyun)

2005-07-08T08:53:00.001-07:00

My close Russian friend, Mr. Pienkowski went on a wedding celebration trip to Tijuana, Mexico in summer with his family. He sent me a letter with a photo which was taken with his family in front of a window in^Bed and Breakfast Inn at noon. In the photo, his wife had some flowers which could be received from him and it seemed that his sincerity toutched her heart. They both seemed happy with fullness of love, but his son and cat both looked like boring. I think it must be bored to his son because it is not a trip for his son, but for^ wedding celebration.

TONY SUNG-timed writing

2005-07-08T08:53:00.000-07:00

There is a family in Mr. Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast Inn. The husband is having a very fantastic trip with his family. This trip is for 5th year of wedding anniversary. He is traveling in May. It is^ cool and warm spring. It is perfect to traveling. He could have(could have had) a chance to go travel last winter, but it might be a bad idea because his kid doesn’t like to travel in winter time. However, when they came into^ hotel, they were looking through the window with the kid. And he had been waiting for a good timing to give the flower. Finally, the flower was given by her husband. When she accepted the flower, both of them were happy. Even the cat was smiling. It seems like everybody is happy. (a good effort)

NAME?

2005-07-08T08:51:00.000-07:00

What city do you think the family is visiting
What season or month of year do you think it is?
Who gives the mothers this flower?
Who is looking out the window?
What do you thing they are looking out the windows?

Perez family was very tired and stresses, so Mr. Perez decided to travel to Europe will all his family.^ Perez family decides to go to Paris, France, because they like a lot art museum(plural). ^Perez family is staying at^ Bed and Breakfast Inn; this place is very comfortable and relaxing. No doubt, it’s the best time for travel to France; is Summer. Ohh, in this moment^Perez family is looking out the window^the terrific picture, and Mr. Perez give flowers to Ms. Perez, the flowers are beutifull.

Kyung-Won, Lee [Practice Test]

2005-07-08T08:37:00.000-07:00

1. What city do you think the family is visiting?
2. What season all month of the year do you think it is?
3. Who gave mother her flower?
4. Who is looking out the window?
5. Why do you think they are the looking out the window?

I think a family were visiting in Atlanta, so they could go Stone Mountain, Six flag, and Turner Field. And I think they were staying in the hotel. The season might be summer. Both of them were looking out the window because a lot of flowers are there in front of hotel, so a few flowers were cut by husband. He gave flowers for his wife.
They had good time, but their check-out time is at 9:00 AM. Maybe they will go outside for their travel.

describe the picture

2005-07-08T08:36:00.000-07:00

Mr. Smith's family is enjoying the traveling. The travel is in memory of Mrs. Smith's 33th birthday. Her birthday is August 2th, today. They went^ Florida yesterday. -to be continue........

Test practice (Andres)

2005-07-08T08:30:00.000-07:00

1. could or might be2. a preposition of place3. a preposition of time4. both...and...5. because or when6. passive form of a verb

The family Ingalls was traveling in Europe, and they tell(told us) us(about) ^the most attractive parade on the travel.
When they arrived to(in) Italy,They were surprised by the Hotel.His(Its) name is Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast Inn.^(It)Is a beautiful,small and friendly place(.)(punctuation) It could be an amazing experience^(remain a night) stay one day there.
Before(After) to get(got) into the hotel,Miss Ingalls was surprised with a(No A prural) flowers.The flowers was(??) given by the manager of the Hotel,Andrew Cantillo.Both of the couple recibed(Got,receive) a present;Mr Ingalls recibed(Got,recieve) a bottle of win.
While they were preparing to go out,a Parade began on the street. All the family Father ,Ma(o)ther ,And daugther, went over the window to watch the parade because the little barbara wanted to Oh I am so happy to be in the story!(You might , because is you)

2005-07-08T08:26:00.000-07:00

On July 8, a wonderfull day in New York. The Corleone family are in Mr. Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast inn. The Corleone family are looking at the window becouse the man brought a serenade for his wife. ^Is her birthday, and her daughter

Homework Due Monday

2005-07-08T05:53:00.000-07:00

Imagine that you are this butterfly or something else in nature
and describe what you feel, can do, and look like. Try to use some of the vocabulary and patterns you have learned in your writing, reading, and grammar classes this session.
Begin with "I am a..."

In-class writing practice test

2005-07-07T06:21:00.000-07:00

This family is in Mr. Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast Inn. Listen to the questions on the audio and then write a paragraph about the family in this picture. Add a main idea sentence and details to your answers. Use the patterns below in your writing. The questions will help give you ideas. Post your paragraph on this team weblog.
1. could or might be
2. a preposition of place
3. a preposition of time
4. both...and...
5. because or when
6. passive form of a verb

Norma comparison

2005-07-06T10:18:00.000-07:00

Sara and Tony both have a car, but their cars a very different, not only in brands, colors, and designs. Sara take cares^ his car, but Tony doesn’t. Their cars are sedan, have car top carrier, are Ford, but, the cars are very different; for example, Tony’s car looks in very bad conditions, the windows and the head light are broken, and the car is dented. Sara’s car looks like new. Use plurals for sedan, carrier, Ford

Tony's car and Sara's car( eunhyoungYoo)

2005-07-06T08:33:00.000-07:00

Tony and Sara live in America. The public transportation is not developed well in America. So a person who doesn't have a car cannot move easily.
Tony and Sara have their cars. Both Tony and Sara have cars made by the same company, Ford.
Their cars have car top carriers because they have to load their big luggage. Their cars are sedans which have four wheels.
There are several differences that their cars have. One is color. Tony’s car is silver, but Sara’s car is black. Another is size. Tony’s car is bigger than Sara’s.
The most difference thing is condition; you can see that easily.
Tony’s car is very old. Moreover he didn’t fix his car. The window is cracked. The headlight is broken. Fenders seem to come off. He has to fix the car.
On the contrary, Sara’s car is new. The car is put in good order. Sara is washing her car every day so her car is bright always.
When you see Sara’s car, you will certainly like to ride in her car.

comparing and contrasting(park, chul hyun)

2005-07-05T08:59:00.000-07:00

Tony and Sara have moved in Atlanta at the same time. Above all, they need a car. So, they went to a car dealer. Sara had $20,000, but Tony had only $2,000; therefore, Sara bought a new car, but Tony bought a used one. Both of their cars have several similarities; they are made by Ford, the same model, and have a car top carrier. However, at the same time, both of them have several differences; Sara's car is colored by brilliant red, but The painting of Tony's car peeled off completely. Sara's car has a good appearance. In contrast, Tony's car has a bad look; it has broken windows, broken headlights, a dented fender, and so on. But they are both happy to buy their own car.

Eunmi

2005-07-05T08:55:00.000-07:00

I have two friends. Their names are Tony and Sara. There are three similarities and differences between them.
^Similiarities are both have same brand. It is ford and it is^same style. It is called sedan. Also they travel a lot. So both have a car top carrier. But now I like to tell there are three differences between them.
^Differences are

comparing & contrasting

2005-07-05T08:43:00.000-07:00

There are two friends. One is Tony and the other is Sara. Both have a car. But their cars have some similarities and differences. The one of similarity that both are ^^same company, Ford. And both have a cartop carrier. Tony's car is color of white, big and old thing. But Tony's car is rusty. I think the car is a scrapped car. I wonder how the car is move. And the car's windows, fender, headlights are broken. In addition, he even made an accident yesterday. Maybe, the car cannot run anymore. On the other hand, Sara bought a new car just now. The car is brand new. The car is color of black and smaller than Tony's car. But this is no match for that. She washs her car everyday. She loves her car like pets.
I want^ get in her car. Tony want too, probably.

Kyung-Won, Lee [comparing and contrasting]

2005-07-05T08:40:00.002-07:00

Everybody has their style. They, Sara and Tony, have cars, but their cars have similar things and different things.
One similarity is that their car made by the same company, Ford. Also they both have cartop carriers and 4 doors.
They have a lot of different thing(plural). First of all, Tony’s car is too old, and many things are broken, such as, windows, fenders, tires, and headlights. Tony’s car is bigger than Sara’s car. Its color is white.
Sara’s car is so smart, and it is small. The other side of Tony’s car, it is new car. Its color is red.
Maybe these are their character.

difference of cars (yasemen)

2005-07-05T08:40:00.001-07:00

I always think car looks like their owner.If the owner is dirty then the car is dirty.
Sara and Tony have a car.Their cars are same mark.Both of the cars^ for 4 people and have a place on their top for carry something.It's fine but I told you car looks like their owner and that's why they have difference. (use plural if there is more than one difference)
For example Tony's car has broken windows.But Sara's car^ like a new car.Tony's car is rusty.But Sara's car is glitter and probably,Tony's car was dented but Sara's car doesn't have a problem.

secon time

I always think car(car, look, like and their need to agree)looks like their owner.If the owner is dirty (comma)then the car is dirty. Sara and Tony have a car.Both of them same mark.Both of the cars ^for 4 people and have a place on their top for carry something.It's fine but I told you cars look like their owners, and that's why they have differences. For example Tony's car has broken windows.But Sara's car is like a new car.Tony's car is rusty.But Sara's car is shiny, and probably Tony's car was dented (comma)but Sara's car doesn't have a problem.

SOJIN SUNG

2005-07-05T08:40:00.000-07:00

There are two people who have cars. The persons' names are Tony and Sara. Their cars have similarities. One silmilarity is that^ are the same brand, which is Ford. They always like to buy a Ford product. Next they are both sedans. Most of the time, they like drive sedans instead of SUVs or trucks. They really don't need different type of cars (anything)except sedan.
In addition, they like to travel, so they always like to put on a luggage rack on the top of the car. But there are differences. Tony's car has broken windows, and it is very rusty all around the car. The car is almost not drivable. Even the fender is almost falling off. But sara's car is brand new. She just got it. The car looks so shiny.

Take care of your car.You may need to sale(Andres)

2005-07-05T08:37:00.000-07:00

Is important to take care of the cars , there are many and important differences between an offer for a damage car or a good car.
As an Example, Tony and Sara went to Carmax to sell their cars, and they received the following results.
Both of the cars have the same brand,Ford Motor Company,the same Classic style ,and are family cars.You can compare those cars in the same price range.
However the prices were different; Sara's car was evaluated in Us 1,000 while tony's car only got Us 700.
Sara's car had^ good Aparience,there was no damage,Did not has dents or any light broken.
^The other side of the coin, was the Tony's Car , it Seem bad,had break windows,it was full of dents,and the lights did not function.

Ryan Kong(Similarities And Differences)

2005-07-05T08:36:00.000-07:00

These are similarities and differences between Tony's and Sara's car. The first similarity is they are made by same company, Ford.^ Second thing is they are sedan style that have 4 doors.^ Last one is they both have cartop carriers, like luggage racks. On the other hand, they have several differences as well. Tony's car seems to be very old. It is dented around the car. Its head lights and car windows are broken. Moreover, the bumper of ^back part is, too. But, Sara's car seems to be^ well-controlled car. (I think you might say a well-maintained car.)

My brother's car. Pepe

2005-07-05T08:33:00.000-07:00

I have two brothers, Carlos and Juan Pablo. Both of them have a car. Yesterday, I went to my parent's house. I saw my brothers' car(use plural); therefore, I want to tell about differences between them. Carlos, my older brother, has a nice car. He usually goes to ^car wash because he always wants to see his car clean. Carlos drives very carefully. Therefore, his car doesn't have any scratches. On the other hand, my brother Juan Pablo is messy. He never goes to the car wash. He doesn't care about his car, so his car has broken windows, and broken head lights. I told him, " Please, take care of your car, becouse is very nasty", and he was Ashamed. He swore he is gonna changes his car.

Why Bob Adams Is Healthy(eunhyoungYoo)

2005-07-05T08:31:00.000-07:00

Bob Adams has good health. I envy his good health and ^glamorous body. I have never seen his illnesses. I want to learn his secret of his good health.
There are several reasons on Bob's good health.
First of all, he makes regulational life. he wakes up at 7am, and go to bed at 10 pm. He has not only regulational time, but also enought sleeping time. Sleeping is important for us.
Second, he has well balanced meals which includes vegetables, friut, and meat. He never drinks a cup of coffee and alcohol and smokes cigarettes. (with a negative, use or)
Moreover, he works very hard and enjoy it. He gets along well with coworkers and clients. Everyone likes him. He workes with joy.
The most important reason is a regulary exercise. He likes sports very much. His favorite sports are baseball and tenneis. He plays this sports every day afternoon. Exercises are very important for our body.

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Why Bob Adams is Healthy? (Park, Chul Hyun)

2005-06-28T08:57:00.000-07:00

Why Bob Adams is Healthy?

Dear my close friend, Sandra Miller

How are you doing, Susan? We haven’t met for four years; I miss you. How about New York? How’s your study in NewYork University? To tell the truth, I am worried about your health; that’s why I sent you a letter. Two week ago, I heard about you from your uncle who visited here. He told me, “Susan’s health condition is not so good because she is in the lab all the time without caring her health. I’m afraid of her fainting.”

Susan, a health problem is very important to you. I know your enthusiasm that you want to finish your study more than other people, but if your health get bad, is there a meaning, your successful complement of the study? So I want to introduce why our mutual friend, Bob Adams(comma) is healthy? There are several reasons.

First, he exercises regularly. For example, at 6:00 A.M., he plays tennis and on^ weekend he plays baseball with his company fellow. Moreover, he never uses a car for attendance instead of using public transportation; he always walks over and over.

Second, he eat well-balanced meals; especially he like vegetables and fruit instead of meat. He never drink coffee, whiskey and smoke cigarettes. (use OR instead of AND since it is negative)

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Kyung-Won, Lee Why My Friend Is Healthy.

2005-06-28T08:43:00.000-07:00

Maybe you don't know ex-roommate, Yong-Chan, has a good regular attitude and is in very good health. I can explain several reasons about why my friend is healthy. (omit that comma and use THAT to make this work correctly)

First of all, he can control of himself about regular-life. This is very important. He always wakes up at 7:00 AM, and he sleeps at 1:00 AM. When I lived in apartment with him, he always lived cyclic-life.

Second, he usually had well-balanced diets. When I ate meal with him, he ate food of various kinds, meat and vegetable.

Finally, he likes exercise, running and cycle. Sport is the most important thing that keeps his good health. He tried to run everyday and he played baseball.

Maybe, If you want to have good health, you must try his life's style.

Why Emily is healthy

2005-06-28T08:39:00.000-07:00

Emily, my classmate, is healthy. There are some factors why she is healthy. First of all, she has swum for nine years. Her major is swimming. So, she can swim very well until now. The next reason is that she doesn't smoking. Also she doesn't like alcholic beverages. When her condition is good, she drinks a little alchol. Third, she has regular habit(use plural). She gets up early every morning. Because she has to go to school on time. And she eats meal same time everyday. Also she goes to bed early. Finally(comma) her personality is very good. She is optimistic and she has simple mind. I want^ be like her.

Health- Renata Silva

2005-06-28T08:37:00.000-07:00

John is a man with a good health and does many things to keep well. Daily, he gets up early, takes a good breakfast with a lot of fruits, he doesn't eat meat and doesn't^ alcohol . Before his job, he walks three days per week, on weekends he plays tennis ans baseball with his family.
John gets along with his coworkers and his family^no strees and solves the problems to talking about and no argue. In the end the day he goes to the bed^ the same time every day and sleeps always 8 hours per day.

Why Mel Gibson is healthy.

2005-06-28T08:31:00.000-07:00

As you know Mel Gibson, a famous acter, is very hearthy. I'm going to give some of reasons why he is healthy. The first way to make him get good health is a well-balanced meals that he takes everyday. Those are balanced vegetables, fruit, meat, and some other things.

- continue.. -

Norma: Why Bob is healthy

2005-06-28T08:28:00.000-07:00

Bob is healthy person, because he takes care himself. Usually, Bob gets up early in the morning, and he goes to bed around 10:00 pm. Bob eats healthy food(need plural), like vegetables, (use and) fruits. Also(comma) he does exercise regularly, and he plays sports like baseball and tennis. Bob enjoys his work, and share with his partners.

Healthy - Anna Crotti

2005-06-28T08:25:00.000-07:00

John Smith is a example of that how the people have to live to have a good healthy.
He always go to the bed early, and because of this, he gets up with a good humor and energy.
He eats just well-balanced food and this way, he can control his weight and has a healthy heart.
john get along well with his coworkers, to void fight and stress in his day. The bad habits don't make part of his live. He hates cigars, coffee and alcohol.
John pratice exercises regularly and this keep him always with a good energy. (watch out for agreement between subject and verb)

Ryan Kong(Why GunWoo Is Healthy?)

2005-06-28T08:24:00.001-07:00

You know, GunWoo, my classmate, has a good lifestyle and is in very good health. These are several ways to make him keep his good health. First of all, he eats well-balanced meals. He usually eats little meat with some vegetables and fruit. He also exercises regularly in his free time if possible, such as tennis and baseball. In addition, he goes to bed and gets up early every day, so he can have enough sleep to relax. Another reason is he doesn't smoke and drink alcohol. Most of all, he gets along well with his coworkers in his workplace. It is very important thing to have a good relationship with other people. If you understand, try these ways.

SOJIN SUNG-why my best friend is in good health

2005-06-28T08:24:00.000-07:00

Why my best friend is so healthy. There are several reasons why. (Combine these)
First of all, he eats regularly, like a little amount of breakfast, a lot of lunch and a big dinner. It is very well-balanced. He manages his schedule very good, he knows when to eat, he knows when to go. He doesn't eat any junk food. Also he like to talk to someone every his spare time to stress out.

Why Bob Adams Is Healthy (yasemen)

2005-06-28T08:22:00.000-07:00

Several reasons why I suggested to you Bob`s lifestyle. ( You need "there are")
First of all,He loves himself(comma) and he takes care^ his health.
Secondly,He always goes to bed at 10:00 pm and gets up^ 8:00 am.He never drink coffee,alcohol and he doesn`t smoke cigarettes.Usually he does his breakfast.H e aets all kind of food.For example fruit,vegetables,meat. (fragment)
He tries to relax in his work(comma) and also he gets along well with his coworkers.
Finaly,He loves sport.In my opinion(comma) sport is the most important thing in our lives health.
He tries to walk to^ job everyday and he plays baseball and tennis.
I think he loves himself very much(comma) and that`s why he try to get health.

Healthy live (Andres)

2005-06-28T08:21:00.000-07:00

Be a healthy person must be a priority in our lives. If you want to be a healthy person follow tree rules:style of live,workout,and rest.
First of all,rest. (fragment)Your body need to recharge the energy spent during the day,and trhow away the dialy pressures.You should go to bed early and not drink or eat any thing that could change your metabolism.Second,It is necessary to workout because you need to exercise your body and mind.
There are many forms to do this,but the best is playng some sport that you enjoy.Play soccer,Baseball,Golf or why not, only walk.
Finally,we have the most important matter ,Your styel of live,We use almost all of our time working;and believe if you can get alone well with your coworkers.have a healthy diet in the work,and do your job in the best way,maybe^ could be member of the ,healthy club.

Why pepe is healthy

2005-06-28T08:19:00.000-07:00

Several Reasons may explain why I am healthy. First of all(comma) I have a well-balanced diet. My favorite foods are steaks and chicken wings, but I always have a salad with them. In my breakfast (comma) I always eat some fruit with milk. Second, I get a lot exercise. I always play tennis, and soccer. I have my car, but I like^walk in the morning before I go to study. After that, I go to work. I work all night. I'm ^bartender, but I never drink beer or any alcohol. Another reason is, I don't have any bad habits, like smoke. In addition, I always go to bed early becouse I need to rest, but sometimes I have a few problems falling asleep.

nice place to live (yasemen)

2005-06-23T08:17:00.000-07:00

Istanbul is a nice place to live.First of all,Istanbul has delicious foods.Our favorite foods are Karniyarik(kind of eggplant food but we put meat in eggplant),Pilav(kind of rice),iskender(kind of meat),midye(kind of fish).Second Istanbul has a lot of historical places.It is very interesting for example you can eat something near the historical place or near the sea.Imagine,you are hungry and you can seat a restaurant near of the sea.Also Topkapi Palace,Dolmabahce Palace,Sultan Ahmet Camisi,Yerebatan Palaca,Kapalicarsi are historical places you can visit them.If you want to eat somehing in the sea you can find ^boat which cook fish and go around the sea.Thirdly,in Istanbul you don't need to car.You can go^ your work by bus or by ship or train.For example,when i was living in Turkey(comma) I always go to my work by ship.Istanbul is seperate two way (Asia and Europe).I was living in Asia and my work was in Europe.You can get a lot of exercise.It`s good for you.Finally,Istanbul has an amazing nightlife.There are a lot of clubs and a lot of fun.You can find cheap alchols in here.

second part

Istanbul is a nice place to live.First of all,Istanbul has delicious foods.Our favorite foods are Karniyarik(kind of eggplant food but we put meat in eggplant),Pilav(kind of rice),iskender(kind of meat),midye(kind of fish).Second Istanbul has a lot of historical places.It is very interesting,for example you can eat something near the historical place or near the sea.Imagine,you are hungry and you can sit a restaurant near the sea.Also Topkapi Palace,Dolmabahce Palace,Sultan Ahmet Camisi,Yerebatan Palaca and Kapalicarsi are historical places you can visit .If you want to eat somehing in the sea you can find ^boat which cook fish and go around the sea.Thirdly,in Istanbul you don't need a car.You can go^ your work by bus or by ship or train.For example,when I was living in Turkey. I always go to my work by ship.Istanbul is divided two way (Asia and Europe).I was living in Asia and my work was in Europe.You can get a lot of exercise.It`s good for you.Finally,Istanbul has an amazing nightlife.There are a lot of clubs and a lot of fun.You can find cheap alcohols in here.

Norma: the place where i live

2005-06-23T08:14:00.000-07:00

THE PLACE WHERE I LIVE
Actually I'm living in Atlanta, this place es very nice. (You need a main idea sentence)I like (you like what)a lot because(subject) is very safety, you can driver your car, walk trought streets. Actually I'm living in Smyrna, Atlanta. This place is very nice. I like it a lot because is very safe, you can driver your car, walk trough streets, and the children can play without feel fear. I live in Post Village; the place is really beautiful, and there you can find much trees, flowers, grass, (conjunction)animals like birds and squirrels. There I can go every afternoon to the gym, or walk around the neighborhood. I love to live in this place because (subject)is very quit, and the most important(subject) is only 15 minutes to Georgia Tech.

Atlanta is a nice place for to live, and actually i'm living in Smyrna, Atlanta. I like a lot to live in Atlanta because is veru safe, you can driver your car, walk trough streets,and the children can play without feel fear.
Smyrna is a place really beautiful, an there you can find much trees, flowers, grass, or animals like birds and squirrels. There I can go every afternoo to the gym, or walk around the neighborhood. I love to live in this place because it's very quit, and the most important it's only 15 minutes to Georgia Tech.

THE PLACE WHERE I WAS LIVING

I come from Ecuador, i lived in Guayaquil, the most important Ecuador's city. Guayaquil is the Principal Harbor, it's near to the beach, the weather is hot and humid, and people is very friendly. Guayaquil is a beautifull city, there are many place that the tourist can visit, for example The Historic Park, Las Peñas, or The Malecon 2000. In Guayaquil are a lot Shopping Centers and Parks.

nice place

2005-06-23T08:12:00.000-07:00

Atlanta is a nice place to live.
1. cheapest price of oil
2. not much population
3. good weather

Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are three reasons why it's nice place. First of all, the cheapest price of oil. I've heard about here is a place which has the cheapest price of oil in U.S. I agree about it whenever I go to the gas station. Second, here is not crowd. That means population is good. For example, you can see some places of bad population. There are a lot of hispanic or too many internayional students. In other word, Atlanta is really good enough for people living. Finally, it's great weather here. I specially love the weather of here like my hometown. This is a the most important reason of my recomend. Arlight, let's live here!

Atlanta, Lawrenceville is a nice place to live. (eunhyoung Yoo)

2005-06-23T08:07:00.000-07:00

I think that Lawrenceville, Atlanta where I live in, is a nice place to live.
There are several reasons why I think so.
First of all, the scenery of Lawrenceville is good. There are a lot of trees, grass, and flowers. It is very clean and quiet.
Second, the weather is very good. It is clear, light, and mild. I like warm weather very much. So the weather of Atlanta is very nice to me.
In addition, the air is fresh, because Lawrenceville has many trees and few cars. The fresh air is good for our health.
I am a Korean. I want to eat Korean food easily. There are lots of Korean markets and Korean restaurants in Lawrenceville. This fact is pleasing.
The most important reason is that the price is cheap. I and my husband are students, so we can't work in here. We get our parents' help. So we have to save our money as much as possible. The price is importasnt for me. Apartment, food, and oil price are cheaper than Korea.
I think that Lawrenceville whereI live now is a nice place to live.

Comma Splice and Run-on sentences

2005-06-23T06:26:00.000-07:00

Use the handout you received in class yesterday to help you correct the following sentences.

1.Georgia Tech has a lot of facilities for athletics, Perimeter College doesn't .
2. Georgia State University has a very large library with many books for research Podunk University has a much smaller library.
3. The Language Institute requires regular attendance,if you miss too many classes you will not pass.
4. After one week, the instructors have a meeting to discuss the level of the students they move students who are too high or too low to a more suitable level.
5. Students can enjoy many activities at Ga Tech while they are studying at the Language Institute there are movies, a gymnasium,concerts, and clubs on campus.

Norma

2005-06-23T05:42:00.000-07:00

Actually I'm living in Atlanta, this place es very nice. (You need a main idea sentence)I like (you like what)a lot because(subject) is very safety, you can driver your car, walk trought streetsActually I'm living in Smyrna, Atlanta. This place is very nice. I like it a lot because is very safe, you can driver your car, walk trough streets, and the children can play without feel fear. I live in Post Village; the place is really beautiful, and there you can find much trees, flowers, grass, (conjunction)animals like birds and squirrels. There I can go every afternoon to the gym, or walk around the neighborhood. I love to live in this place because (subject)is very quit, and the most important(subject) is only 15 minutes to Georgia Tech.

Dulith is a nice place to live.

2005-06-22T09:01:00.000-07:00

There are a lot of reasons why Duluth is a nice place to live.first of all,there are many restaurants,Mart near in my house.Alos Duluth is clear a town(punctuation) there are new buildilng,apartment

Why Seoul is a nice place to live (Park, chul hyun)

2005-06-22T08:57:00.000-07:00

Several reasons might explain why does Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system like( the word with would work here, but not like) one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in South Korea, there is dynamic active internet shopping and developing( you need a noun form to be parallel with internet shopping) so many businesses relying on a cellphone business.

Second Draft

Several reasons might explain why Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. You can find so many people in downtown Seoul at night and it’s not unique in Seoul. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system with one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in Seoul, there is dynamic active internet shopping and so many allied cellphone businesses. You can use the best high-speed internet service in the world for the cheapest price and also choose various kinds of cellphones in Seoul. That’s why I love Seoul.

Live In Medellin Andres

2005-06-22T08:41:00.000-07:00

My city, Medellin, is the best place to live in Colombia mainly has three incredible things at the same time : weather , nice people, and wonderful landscape.
First of all,the city is named the City Of The Eternal Spring,and it is not in vain because the city is between 25 an 32 degrees Centigrade all year.
Another reason is the people , this area of the country has a especial race . They are descendents of a hard workers ,because the caracteristics of their topography wiht many mountains,rivers and, wild forest made difficult to access to towns. Therefore, they learned to fight againt bad conditions and became competitive people. Another characteristic of our people is their beautiful women can find an extrange mix of races Spanish,European,and native have developed across the time pretties woman. (This sentence needs punctuation or grammar work)
The third

ANNA CROTTI - Place to live

2005-06-22T08:34:00.000-07:00

Roswell is a nice place to live because it is safe and quiet.
It is good living out of the city, without noises or intense traffic.
We have a lot of trees and, because off this, we have fresh and clean air.
If you want go out for a dinner, we have a lot of options with good prices and great taste. If you prefer something more "happy", you can go to Irish Pubs that are spread in the entire city.

Renata Why my city...

2005-06-22T08:33:00.000-07:00

I live in Rio de Janeiro, Brazil. Rio is a good city to live in because it has a good weather and the most urban forest in the city.
There are many places to practice outdoors sports like, surfing, playing beach soccer, riding bicycle, running, walking with family. Many large and beautiful beaches
There are a lot of restaurants, theaters, movies, malls, some parks and a big zoo.
Our gastronomy has a special taste, due several kinds of foods and seasonings.

* here you need to use the ing forms without to: surfing, playing beach soccer, etc.
or you could say: There are many places to surf, to play beach soccer, to ride bicycle, to run, to walk with family.

Atlanta is a nice place to live.

2005-06-22T08:29:00.001-07:00

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta have a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta has a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

SOJIN SUNG

2005-06-22T08:29:00.000-07:00

The nice places to live always have positive reasons are good environment to study, tansportation issues, and many places to visit...etc. But I would say South Carolina is a such nice place to live. I lived there for 1 year; it was so beautiful. In my personal opinion, I would like to say South Carolina is the best place to live, because when I lived there, I studied most of time. I don't have to hang out that much. I just tried to stay home and relax. I used to go out with my friends to drink beer everyday. One day I realized there was no purpose for drinking beer when I was being a student. So I stopped. If I had lived here, I would probably have gone out *everyday and waste all the money. *( you used a difficult verb form here which requires the following construction: If I had lived....I would probably have gone out)
now I'm trying to stay my home as possible.
Another reason why it is good place to live is transportation. South Carolina is a kind of country city. Not much traffic in rush hours. Everytime when you drive around, you don't feel any traffic.

Yeimi

2005-06-22T08:25:00.001-07:00

There are a lot of reasons I like Medellín. Firt of all, it is my hometown. I was born there 27 years ago, and all my family lives there and also my best friends. The weather is special; we don't have seasons, and I think that it is good for the agriculture. There are big mountains around the city. In addition, we have large crops such as potates, beans, bananas and especially coffee. As well as vegetables, our mountains have different kind of flowers in different colors. Our food is very nutritious because it is natural, and people who is living in the farms work hard for that. Also Medellín has the tallest building in Colombia, you can see all the city if you go there. The downtown has many kind of stores, and you can buy something cheaply. The people is really nice and friendly, you can make friends wherever you go. the nigth life is spectacular, there are big nigth clubs and you can choose whatever kind of music do you like to listen or dance. And the most important thing in Medellin is that we are a beautiful people and we love people who visit our city. COME TO MEDELLIN WHEREVER YOU LIKE.....

Ryan Kong(Special Place to live)

2005-06-22T08:25:00.000-07:00

Atlanta is a nice place to live for everyone. There are severl reasons why it is nice place to live there. First of all, there is very fresh air.(is has very ...) You can breathe it while you are living there. It can help your health best. Another reason is people who live in Atlanta are very kind. You, moreover, can eat fresh fruit, such as, peaches, grapes, and watermelones ; they are growned in good weather and ground condition. The major reason is Atlanta has good education enviorment. There are very famous colleges and uiversities, like GA Tech and Emory Univ.

Santa Marta, pepe

2005-06-22T08:24:00.001-07:00

Several reasons might explain why Santa Marta is a good place to live. First of all, Santa Marta is^ very beautiful city. It has a nice beach which everybody call El rodadero, Tairona park, the castle. Second, I enjoy the night entertainment the city has. Wherever you want, you can find very good discotheques, but La Escollera is the best. Santa Marta has a lot of restaurants, but when you are at the beach, you can eat shrimp. Next, I enjoy the cultural life that Santa Marta offers. Great concerts, and new films are always available. If you want to have a good time, you have to be there.

Kyung-Won, Lee Korea is a nice place to live

2005-06-22T08:24:00.000-07:00

The nice place has a lot of factors. I think Korea is a nice place to live, so I will explain it. First of all, my appetite is Korean food, Kim-Chi and rice. When I came to U.S., I usually ate a sandwich; nowadays I can't eat bread. I don't like bread anymore. Second, A lot of my friends are there. I have good relationship with my friends. Korea has, moreover, my comfortable home, which is located in Dae-Jeon, Korea. My home is very relaxing since my family lives in it. But the most important reason that Korea is a nice place to live also, probably it's my language and the Korean race. Many Koreans live in Korea. I feel very comfortable;we look the same, and we have the same culture,Fast-Fast culture. Also, I proud of myself in Korean since this was created by Korean.

A historic event

2005-06-19T06:49:00.000-07:00

Charles Lindberah flight anlong across the Atlantic Ocean,May 20,1927,at 7:57P.M
he take off from the roosevelt in New York City
He did't have parachute and radio in her airplant.
He flew over Nova Soctia, Newfoundland and Lreland. He flew 3.600 Miles, in 33 hours
On May 21,at 10:22P.M He arrived Le Boureet Airport in Paris, French
100.000 people greeted him. he was first nonstop solotransatlantic flight. New York Tims wrote about him. he recived a medal. he became a national hero and simbol of aviation

Rain cause accident

2005-06-19T06:36:00.000-07:00

Jim parks was riding a motorcycle at 3:00AM,on Route 397.The weather was raining. he turned right and he skidded on the parement at Kennedy street.
he saw in front of car,so he avoided the car. his motorcycle was skiding on walkroad and written areport about the accident. he was not injured but a woman said her arm was bruisd
the police took her a woman with general hospital

Charles Lindbergh's historic flight(park, chul hyun)

2005-06-06T08:58:00.000-07:00

May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York city for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. He didn’t get a parachute or radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew(preposition) Paris, France. It took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. A mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. The headline was “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.”

[second draft]

May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York City for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. It was a sunny day. To reduce his airplain's weight, he took out a parachute and radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew to Paris, France. I think it was a very exciting flight. That's why he was the first man trying to the transatlantic flight. But I think it was also a boring flight at the same time. Because it took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. Sometimes he was sleepy, and he fell in dangerous moments. But there was a fly, and it bothered him. Thus, he can finished his flight successfully. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. The mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.” It was the headline. He became a real national hero.

Ryan Kong(A Historic Event)

2005-06-06T08:34:00.002-07:00

Charles Lindberg planned a historic flight that flew across the Atlantic Ocean. It was the first nonstop solo flight without having any parachute or radio. On May 20, 1927, at 07:57 P.M, he took off at Roosevelt Field, New York City, and flew over many countries and cities, Nova Scotia, New Foundland, and across the Atlantic Ocean. Fianally, on May 21, at 10:22 P.M, he landed at Le Bourset Airport, France. It was 3,600 miles in distance and it took about 33 and half hours.
When he arrived there, there were more than 100,000 of people who congratulated his historic successful flight, the great national hero. At present, he has been remembered as one of the symbol of aviators.

A historic event

2005-06-06T08:34:00.001-07:00

1. Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New york city.
2. His plane didn't have any parachutes and radios.
3. He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it take 33hours.
4. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm.
5. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him.
6. He received the medal.
7. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!

Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New York City. His plane didn't have any parachutes or radios.
He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it took 33hours. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him. He received the medal. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!

p.55 A Historic Event

2005-06-06T08:34:00.000-07:00

Main idea sentence

==> Charles Lindbergh, who was an american, made the first
nonstop solo transalantic flight from NewYork to Paris.

Yasemen Aydin(a historic event)

2005-06-06T08:29:00.001-07:00

Charles Lindbergh flight to Atlantic Ocean by himself.
He took off from Roosevelt Field in New York City on May 20 at 7:57 PM.It was so difficult because he didn`t have parachute or radio.He flew 3.600 miles in 33 hours after he flew over Nova in Paris on May 21 Scotia.He arrived at 10:22 PM.
100.000 people greeted him .Probably he had got a bad trip but it was not a problem because it was his destination point.The Mayor of City gave him a medal.
He become a national hero.New York Times wrote about him.
Charles Lindbergh had a dream--everyone has a dream. It`s hard to make your dreams come true,but he did.

Norma: A historic event

2005-06-06T08:28:00.000-07:00

On May 20, 1927 (comma)a pilot man called Charles Lindbergh started a fabulous adventure. He wanted to fly from New York City to Paris. He didn't use a parachute or radio, and he didn't stop because the fligth was across the Atlantic Ocean. Charles Lindbergh travel 3,600 milles and 33 f hours until land at to France, it's was on May 21. Almost 100,000 people were wainting for him in the Le Bourset Airport, beacause he was considered as National Hero. He got a medal like a Symbol of aviations.

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On May 20, 1927, at 7:57 pm, a pilot called Charles Linderbh in his airplane, called Spirit of St. Louis, started a fabulous adventure. He wanted to fly from Ney York City to Paris. He didn't use a parachute or radio, and didn't stop because the flight was across the Atlantic Ocean. Charles Lindbergh flew over New York, Novia Scotia, New Found Land and Ireland, and he crossed around 3,600 and 33 f hours until land to France. It was on May 21, at 10:22 pm. Almost 100,000 people were waiting for him in the Le Bourset Airport, because he was considered as National Hero. He got a medal like a Symbol of Aviation.

Kyung-Won, Lee A Historic Event

2005-06-06T08:27:00.002-07:00

Main idea

1. May 20, 1927, Charles Lindbergh, who rode his airplane, took off in New York City at 7:57 P.M.
2. While he was flying, he didn't have a parachute or radio system.
3. Also, before he arrived in France, he passed Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, and Ireland while he was flying.
4. May 21, he arrived Le Boureet Airport, that it is located in Paris, France , at 10:22 P.M. He flew in about 27 hours.
5. When he got out of his airplane, 100,000 people were glad about his flying success.
6. He recieved medal.
7. New York Times wrote that, he was national hero, about him.

May 20, 1927, Charles Lindbergh, who rode his airplane, took off in New York City at 7:57 P.M. While he was flying, he didn't have a parachute or radio system. Maybe he was very brave man. Also, before he arrived in France, he passed Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, and Ireland while he was flying. May 21, he arrived Le Boureet Airport, that it is located in Paris, France , at 10:22 P.M. While he was flying in about 33 hours, he passed in about 3,600 miles. When he got out of his airplane, 100,000 people were glad about his flying success. This day was Charles Lindbergh's historic flight across the Atlantic Ocean. It was the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. Maybe He was a first man. He recieved medal. New York Times wrote that, he was national hero, about him.

main idea, a historic event (pepe)

2005-06-06T08:27:00.001-07:00

On May 20, 1927 at 7:57, Charles Lindbergh's tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute and a radio. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On may 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.

The first manned flight across the Atlantic Ocean was Charles Lindbergh's. on May 20, 1927 at 7:57 p.m, he tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute or a radio because he didn't want to have a lot weight. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On May 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.

Anna Crotti - Aviation

2005-06-06T08:27:00.000-07:00

On May 20, 1927, Charles Lindbergh, pilot, took off from Roosevelt Field, NY to start a great adventure, a flight across the Atlantic Ocean.
The airplane, called Spirit of St. Louis, was too small and the weight made a lot of difference because he couldn't stop to put more gas, so he didn't have a parachute or radio. The adventure became more dangerous
He traveled 3,600 miles, in 33 hours. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland and Ireland. On May 21, at 10:22 p.m., he landed in the Le Bouget Airport, Paris, French, where 100,000 people were greeting and waiting for him. He received a medal for this trip, and was nominated a new national hero and symbol of aviation.

A Historic Event (eun hyoung Yoo)

2005-06-06T08:11:00.000-07:00

Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m, It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radioes in his plane.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. He accossed the Atlantic Ocean by flight. It took 33hours and 30 minites. It was 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at le bourget airport which is located Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived(preposition and article) airport, 1000,000 peaple greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. He became articlenew national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, so he became a symbol of aviation. (He wasn't a flight. He was the first to make the flight.)

(Second draft)
Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m. It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radios in his plane, because he had to make the flight's weight lighter.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. It took 33hours and 30 minites for 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at Le Bourget airport which is located in Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived at the airport, 100,000 people greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. His news was reported in The New York Times newspaper. He became a new national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot , so he became a symbol of aviation.

(Main idea)
Charles Lindbergh was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot.

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2005-06-03T09:11:00.000-07:00

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Rain Causes Accident( Yoo, eun hyoung)

2005-06-01T19:46:00.000-07:00

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile(need a prepostion and an article) on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

You Asked, by Yeimi

2005-06-01T10:28:00.000-07:00

You asked me what I saw today,
and I said,
"I saw a flower sleeping in the garden,
I saw a girl swearing allegiance,
I saw a boy stealing the flower,
and I saw a flower dying for the love."

You asked me where I have been.
I replied,
"I have been in the white clouds, in the soft clouds, since the dark.
I have felt the wind in my face and
the freedom in my heart for one day."

And then you asked, "What do you hope for?"
I told you that I hoped for many things:
for the impossible love that everyone has,
for the invisible kiss that you never give,
and most of all,
for the dream about you that I hope it will be true.

"Route 397", By Tony Sung

2005-06-01T09:00:00.000-07:00

Time was 3 o’clock
The man was riding a motorcycle on Route 397 with helmet on.
It was a rainy day.

He skidded on the wet pavement nearby Kennedy St.
He tried to turn right to prevent an accident, but finally, he bumped a car.

Then he fell down to the sidewalk and knocked over two pedestrians.
One was the guy and one was the woman.
The police arrived exactly after it happened.

The men were not injured, but a woman was bruised,
The police man took her to the general hospital to make sure she is fine.

One day, there was raining on the Route 397.
A man was riding a motor bicycle. He was wearing a helmet and everything seemed to be fine. Suddenly he skidded on the pavement at Route 397 across Kennedy St. He tried to turn right to prevent an accident, but he couldn’t make it. He just jumped in the road where the car was, and then unfortunately, he finally bumped a car. He fell down to the sidewalk and knocked over two pedestrians. One was the guy and one was the woman. After a few minutes, the police arrived and made an accident report. While the police was(police is considered plural. If we want to express singular, we say policeman or policewoman) writing the report, he realized the woman got injured which was the arm. So the police took her to the general hospital to make sure she is (Use past tense) fine.

Kyung-Won, Lee pp 43-44

2005-06-01T08:56:00.000-07:00

A person is Jim Parks. He was riding (use article or possessive adjective)motor bicycle at 3:00 PM on ROUTE 397. While he was turning right, he skided on wet pavement. So his bicycle hit a car, which was located on KENNEDY St., so the car was dented by the bicycle. Also, some pedestrians had to get a little damage. After that, some police arrived at accident place. The Policeman started to make accident report, which are a woman’s arm is bruised and two men were not injured. Finally, the woman was moved general hospital by the policeman.
Use the past tense.

Rain cause accident ( Park, Chul Hyun)

2005-06-01T08:53:00.001-07:00

Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and surprised. First, He turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most of pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person who was his arm bruised. The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

[After Edit]

Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and was surprised. First, he turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person whose arm was bruised.(The previous sentence sould actually be revised anddivided into 2 parts or have some relative pronoun added) The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

Yasemen Aydin(Rain Causes Accident)

2005-06-01T08:53:00.000-07:00

Yesterday ,Jim Parks,a fellow student,had an accident near school.
At 3:00 A.M. ,he was driving down to Route 397.The weather was raining.At Kennedy St.,he turned right.While he was turning right,his bicycle skided on wet pavement.He knocked over the a(don't use two articles) man and a woman,who were walking on sidewalk.
At 3:04 A.M.,the police arrived there.
Jim Parks and man ,who was walking on sidewalk, reported that they were not injured(need a comma) but the woman told the police that her arm was bruised.
The police took her to General Hospital.

motorcycle accident

2005-06-01T08:33:00.000-07:00

A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school.

Jim Parks was riding a motorcycle at 3 o'clock on Route 397. It was rainning.
He made right turn on Kennedy Street, and he skidded on wet pavement.
One car ran into his motorcycle. He move the handle to avoid the car. But the road was slippery, so he skidded on wet pavement.
His motorcycle ran into the side walk. Two pedestrians were knocked over. They were so frightened.
The police came after 4 minutes.
The police asked the situation and condition. One women said her arm was bruised. And Jim and one guy were not injured.
The police took her with the General hospital.

*Main idea setence : Jim Parks had an accident.

Rain Cause Accident( Eun Hyoung Yoo)

2005-06-01T08:26:00.000-07:00

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automovlie on 397 route. When he was going to school at 3 pm, it was ranning.
His automovile skided on wet pavement on RT397, and Kennedy.
He saw opposite side car comming. So he avoided the car.
His automovile skided at a footway where two person was going past. Suddenly two passenger was shocked, ran away.
At 3: 04 pm, the police arrived.
One passenger reported he didn't injured, but another passenger reported his arm was bruised.
The police man take injured man along the general hospital.

(second draft)
Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

Anna Crotti - Rain Causes Accident

2005-06-01T08:21:00.000-07:00

Rain Causes Accident

Mike needed to visit his Mother in another city. The weather was very bad, but he had urgency in visit his mother. He took your motorcycle and got out of his house at three o’ clock. Was raining, and in the intersection between the Route 397 and Kennedy Street, his motorcycle skied on wet pavement and he lost control and hit the car. He went up to the sidewalk and knocked over the pedestrians who were walking on the sidewalk. After three minutes, the police arrived and made a report about the accident. The police men asked if somebody got hurts, and just one woman had a broken arm. So, the officer leaved the women in the hospital.
Now we don't know what is going to happen with Mike. We hope he is okay.

P.43 Make sentence for each pictures

2005-06-01T08:20:00.000-07:00

Imagine that you are a reporter for the school newspaper. A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school, and you are reporting it. Use the following pictures to guide you in making notes for the report. Make your inpormation detailed and precise. Add more details if you wish. Work with a partner.

1. Jim Parks was riding a motor-cicle on route 397 in raining on 3o'clock.

2. He's making right-turn for get on the Kennedy Rd.

3. The motor-cicle skided on wet pavement to one car which is parked.

4. He tried to avoid from making accident, but he was knocked over on the sidewalk.
There were two pedestrians got supprise and started running away to survive.

5. On 3:04, a police car figured it out.

6. The police officer is getting inpormation about people's safty.
Two guys are fine, but one women got bruised at her arm.

7. They got off from the police-car at the hospital.

* Main Idea : Especially careful on driving in rainning day.

Where is your paragraph? Is this really the main idea?

accident Edgar (pepe)

2005-06-01T08:18:00.000-07:00

This afternoon Jim Park had an accident near to Kennedy Street. At 3:00 p.m, he was riding his motorcycle down 397 route in the snow. At kennedy Street, he turned right, and the car skidded on a patch of ice. First, he hit the car who was passing at the same time. On the side walk, Angela and Jordan were walking(comma) and Jim hit them too, after that, the police arrived, Angela said " I'm not injured, and my arm is bruised" and Jim said "don't worry about it, my mother is a doctor, I will take you at the hospital". Angela and Jim were talking while they walked to the hospital, but Angela felt a lot of pain and Jim took her arm and touch her, she felt different.(You have a run-on sentence here. Add some more punctuation.)

Ryan Kong(Rain Causes Accident)

2005-06-01T08:14:00.000-07:00

Yesterday afternoon, Gon, a student of Georgia Tech LI, had a terrible accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy Drive while he was going home. At 3:00 P.M, he was driving down Route 397 alone by motorcycle in the rain. At Kennedy Drive, he turned right, and his motorcycle skidded on wet pavement. First, he hit the car of SoJin, a student of Georgia Tech LI. The car was dented deeply. Then he knocked over a couple of pedestrians, GunWoo and SoYoung, who were walking on the sidewalk. Moments later, at 3:04 P.M, the police arrived. None of them were injured. SoYoung, one of the pedestrians, just told police that her arm was bruised. The police took her to General Hospital for examination. GOOD

Review for Quiz

2005-06-01T06:56:00.000-07:00

1. The transition words first, next , finally, lastly are followed by a comma. The transition word then does not need a comma. (page 5)
2. When you have a dependent clause at the beginning of a sentence, you should separate it from the main clause with a comma. ( See page 9)
3. When you have items in a series, use commas to separate them. These items may be words, phrases, or clauses. You don't need a comma if only two items are listed. (page 11)
4. When you use and to join two independent clauses, a comma comes before and unless the clauses are very short. (page 19)
5. Introductory phrases are followed by a comma.(page 39)
6. Appositives are set off by commas. If the appositive is at the end of the sentence, you only need one comma before it. If it is in the middle of the sentence, there must be a comma before and after it. ( page 40)
7. Direct speech is set off by a comma and quotation marks.(page 41)
8. Rules for using the comma with dates, place names and numbers are on page 50.

9. Pages 41 and 52 review changes in verb tense when you change direct quotations to indirect quotations (reported speech).

Yoo, Eun Hyoung (prepositional walk)

2005-05-29T13:01:00.000-07:00

I needed a book for toefl. So I bought my toefl book at the book store yesterday.I went out the O'keefe building . I was walking straight one block on Techwood street. That time I saw two students on the bench. I left them talking good-bye. I go on to walk.I turned left on Fifth street. A cloud floated away over the sky.When I acroos the I-75 bridge, I felt tired. So I stopped walking. Then I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I acrossed the street. The bookstore is at the corner of on Fifth street and on Spring street. I went in the bookstore. And I bought my book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.

(second dratf)

I needed a book to study for toefl. I wanted my toefl book as soon as possible. So I went to bookstore and I bought a toefl book.When I finished my classes, I went out the O'keefe building. I was walking streight one block on TechWood street. In that time, I saw two classmates on the bench. I left them talking good-bye. I went on walking.I turned left on Fifth street. I saw that a cloud floated away over the sky.When I across(across is a preposition--you need the word cross, which is the verb) the bridge, I was very tired. So I stopped walking. I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I across the street. the bookstore is at the corner of Fifth street and on Spring street. I went into the bookstore. I bought a toefl book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.

(third draft)
I needed a book to study for TOEFL. I wanted my TOEFL book as soon as possible. So I went to bookstore and I bought a TOEFL book. When I finished my classes, I went out the O'keefe building. I was walking straight one block on Tech Wood street. At that time, I saw two classmates on the bench. I left them saying good-bye. I went on walking. I turned left on Fifth Street. I saw that a cloud floated away over the sky. When I went across the bridge, I was very tired, so I stopped walking. I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I went across the street. The bookstore is at the corner of Fifth street and on Spring street. I went into the bookstore. I bought a toefl book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.

Park, chul hyun

2005-05-27T09:02:00.000-07:00

I hoped to go to the bookstore that's why I forgot my composition book. But I don't know how to go to the bookstore. So I asked to my spouse, Eun Hyoung. "How can I go to the bookstore?" She said kindly "Oh, it's very easy. In front of O'keefe building, go down the TECHWOOD St. about one block, and you can find the stop signal. Then turn left, and go across the bridge on 5th St. about two block. After then, you can find the bookstore in the corner of northeast."

[Second Draft]
Last day I went to the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE, following my wife's direction. I started from O'keefe building to the bookstore. I walked under the clear blue sky. A slight air on my forehead is fresh and make(remember you are in the past tense) me feel good. Flower's(this is singular, so you need an article) odor filled the air. I walked along the techwood street, and stopped in front of (article)stop signal following my wife's direction. Then I turned left on 5th street and went over a bridge. There is Interstate highway 85, 75 under the bridge. Anyway when I went straight two blocks, I could find the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE on the cornor of northeast. I was so happy that's why the bookstore was very close from O'Keefe Building and very a nice place. There was a many books, large space for resting. It was a best place for reading and filling my intelligent demands. It was also a good place by air-conditioning system. After I entered into the bookstore, I went up the second floor. Then I searched (for)my composition book and found it. It was on the top of the shelves of the cornor of northeast. After I found my book, I made a phone call to my wife with happiness.

[Third Draft]

Yesterday, I went to the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE, following my wife's direction. I started from O'keefe building to the bookstore. I walked under the clear blue sky. A slight air on my forehead was fresh and made me feel good. The flowers' odor filled the air. I walked along the Techwood Street, and stopped in front of the stop signal following my wife's direction. Then I turned left on 5th street and went over a bridge. There is Interstate highway 85, 75 under the bridge. Anyway when I went straight two blocks, I could find the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE on the northeast corner. I was so happy because the bookstore was very close from O'Keefe Building and very a nice place. There were many books and a large space for resting. It was the best place for reading and filling my intelligent demands. It was also a good place which has air-conditioning system. After I entered into the bookstore, I went up the second floor. Then I searched for my composition book and found it. It was on the top of the shelves of the northeast corner. After I found my book, I made a phone call to my wife with happiness.

Name??

2005-05-27T08:52:00.000-07:00

Direction to get Crosland Tower

Start from the LI
Get onto 6th street towards the east
Turn left on Fowler Street
Go all the way to the end and make a right
Make a left turn at the first traffic light
Go all the way again then make a right turn
Go about a quater mile after you make a turn
It will be on the right side of the road.

This is the easiest way to get Crosland Tower if you are following these directions( this is singular--directions is plural. They must agree).Let's start from the LI. Go get your car and simply get onto 6th street. Drive towards to the east which is heading to the baseball stadium. When you see it over the wall, make a left turn on Fowler Street. Drive aboout a half mile until you see the dead end. Soon as you get there, simply make a right turn. Once you make a right turn, you probably see white buildings on the each side of the road. At the fisrt traffic light, make a left turn again. And you'll see a huge of parking lot (this is not a complete sentence). Then you are on right track so far. Now you are almost there, from now on, you only have to make one turn at the end of the steet. Drive about 30 seconds, then you'll see the dead end again. Just make a right turn again and drive anout quater mile. then you will find it on the right side. Have a nice day~!

Prepositional Walk ( Gun-woo , Kim )

2005-05-27T08:21:00.000-07:00

Two days ago, I took a walk and went to the Book store, Barnes & Nobles, from O'keefe building for doing a classwork.

1. started from O'keefe
2. walk strait on the techwood st.
3. make a left turn when you arrived at first signal.
4. take a 5th street.
5. keep going to see a object building.
6. you can get books.

While I was walking on the bridge, I could see a lot of cars. I felt little scared. It was over side of 85 high way. That feeling made me to walk faster. ^^;;
Finally, I got there and spend a time with my friends with dringking cofee at the Star Bucks.

Ryan Kong(Preposition Walk)

2005-05-27T08:20:00.000-07:00

Do You Know How to Get to the Bookstore? How can you get to the bookstore?
These are the directions for you to get there from the O'keefe Building. First, go straight one block on Techwood Drive. You can see the trees and clubs like fraternity along the street. After that, turn left onto Fifth Street. Next, go across the overpass and go straight 2 blocks. While you are walking, you'll be able to see some people who are sitting at the tables in front of restaurants. One of the most popular restaurants for my classmates is Tin Drum. You should try to eat Thai food there if you have not. It's on the right after you go across the overpass. Finally, you can find the bookstore on the right corner. It's next to the cafeteria, Starbucks.

Norma's Prepositions

2005-05-25T19:32:00.000-07:00

Today I was cooking around 9’clock. I made a tuna’s salad with rice. All the ingredients were in to refrigerator But I couldn’t find the lettuce because (it)was under the potatoes. The onions were next to the potatoes and tomatoes over the carrots. Then I started to cook.
First I put the kettle on the stove, then I went around the living room and I turned on the TV, then I return to the kitchen and continued cooking. The rice was in the cabinet in front of the stove. I put it in the kettle with hot water on the stove.

Edgar (pepe) preposition walk

2005-05-25T11:35:00.000-07:00

Yesterday, I went from the O'keefe building to Starbucks. I decided to walk there because I wanted a java chips frapucchino. When I left the O'keefe building, I went to Peachstreet, I passed the street and I saw the fraternity's building. Some guys were playing soccer when I went around the fraternity's building. I found 5th Street(use a comma here) and at the light I turned a left and I went over the I- 75 bridge. After that, I went right at the bridge and I found another light. I stopped for a moment and I looked down. Above me was the sun, which was too hot. I still walked straight and I saw a T-Mobile office at my left. At my right (use a comma here)I saw Tin Drum Asian cafe. When I finally got to Starbucks, I sat down with my java chips frapucchino. It Was good.

Andres Preposition

2005-05-25T08:28:00.000-07:00

Today after class , I went from the o’keefe building to studies center , I saw many cars park on to sixth street , some ones was park on the left side others in the right side , I took first by sixth street an go down straight ahead until the intersection with the other street(On the right side GT baseball field). I used to ride the Stinger but this time I choose walk across the campus ,I could see some men working , one of them was driving a big machine , it had a large mechanical arm under the roof , and a couple of Mechanical legs in each sides. I saw that for 10 minutes. After that I walked across from some kinds of fraternities(punctuation?) I could see barbecues over the grown and many garbage under them. The next thing that I did , was stop and took air , I was without air ( maybe you mean out of breath) , while I was waiting , I heard sounds of birds , they are above me , on the tree ( Your biggest problem is that you have put too many phrases and clauses together without the proper punctuation or conjunctions. These are called run-on sentences. Go back and divide the long sentences into shorter groups. The ideas should go together logically. Then I will check this again.)

Anna Crotti

2005-05-25T08:17:00.000-07:00

Preposition Walk

I need go to the bookstore to buy some books. But I didin't know where the Bookstore is.I have to ask to somebody for information.
I was in the O'keefe building, so I ask to Birl.
Birl, could please explain to me how I go to the bookstore? Birl told me,
"Anna, you need acrross the street and go straight. After one block, you must turn to the left. Go over the brigde. After that, you have to cross the street again. You will pass the Asian Cafe, and on the corner you will see the Bookstore. "
So, I started to walk. On the way, I walked over the bridge, and I saw a lot of very fast cars under the bridge. After that, one bus stopped for me across the street.
I passed the Asia Cafe and I saw a lot of people drink some coffe. Next, I arrived in the Bookstore.

Yasemen Aydin

2005-05-25T08:15:00.003-07:00

Preposition Walk
I was so hungry and I wanted to eat something good but I didn`t know where to find the Student Center.
That`s why I must get some directions from someone else.
When I walked to down to 5th St. I asked a girl how can I find the student center.
It`s so hard because I can understand a little English.
Then she started to give directions for me."First,you must across the street and turn left.You will see a park in front of you.Then go left and continue.You will see a big building. so this is a students center."
I think I was so confused and she understood this.
she asked me that "Do you want to eat something?"
I said "Yes.I am so hungry"
she said "oke.when you find student center you will see stairs.When you see stairs turn left,you can find something for eat"
thank you so much I said. So I started to walk ..
I crossed the park but I didn`t see students center so I waited and smoked.Finally I saw student center while I was smoking.

Jeon, so young (preposition walk)

2005-05-25T08:15:00.002-07:00

I walked from O'keefe building to the bookstore yesterday. While I was walking straight one block on Techwood street, the big dog walked down by my side. I was so scared. And I turned left on Fifth street. One bird was flying over my head. Then I acroos the I-75 bridge. When I went over the bridge, many cars were driving under the bridge. And I went straight one block. Then I crossed(this is a preposition--you need the verb crossed) the street crossing. I could see the bookstore. The bookstore is at the corner of Fifth street and on Spring street. We can drink a coffee and eat something. There is very nice place.

I am going to goto the bookstore. eun mi,lee

2005-05-25T08:15:00.001-07:00

I get out O'keefe building and walk down the stairs , turn right, go straight for one block ,and make left go straight until frist intersection,across the street on the corner(Thisis a run-on sentence. Divide it). There is(need an article) bookstore. You need more prepositional phrases.

Kyung-Won, Lee Preposition walk

2005-05-25T08:15:00.000-07:00

From O'keef building To Rich Computer Center

When I came to Georgia tech, I confused many streets, but I can go to the computer center. If you want to make a computer ID, you shoud follow this way. At first, go straight one block on Sixth Street. After that, turn left on Fowler Street, and pass two blocks. Then turn right in front of the parking place. Then pass two blocks again. Finally, turn left and you can see Rich Computer Center on the left. This building is very close from the O'keef building. Then try to look around where you are, I guarantee you will find the Rich Computer Center.

Yeimi Salazar "Preposition Walk"

2005-05-25T08:13:00.000-07:00

Every day, I walk from the O'keefe Building to Midtown Station. When my classes are over, I meet with my friends. First, I go downstairs and I see many people sitting around the tables in front of O'keefe Building, they are eating lunche or just taking about the homework for the next day.

Some friends and I go to Starbucks before Midtown Station. We walk on Techwood street just one block, then we turn to the left on 5Th street. Sometimes we take the trolley, but when the weather is good we prefer to walk. We have to take the bridge before we take Tech Square. There are a lot of cars under the bridge because there is I-85 (need punctuation here)also we can see the traffic jam every afternoon because we always take the same way.

Then we walk across the street to the right, there is an Asian Food Restaurant the name is (take this out, add commas, and you will have an appositive)Tim Drum, so many people go there for take lunch. We walk along the Tech Square, there are some stores with big glasses like mirror, it's funny because when we go along the street there are many people looking the mirror while they walking.(run on sentence) Then we pass the traffic light and you can see the Bookstore in the corner. After that, you can see Starbucks, we always go there before to go to Midtown Station, there are some students studying or drinking coffee or smoking..(run on sentence) Next to Starbucks Pizz isa Ray's is delicious go to eat there if you are hungry. After 1 or 2 hours we continue walking to Midtown Station, we go straight to the next traffic light and then we turn on the left on Peachtree street, we walk 2 blocks on the right and in the next parking we must to turn on the right.(run on sentence) Finally we can see the Marta Station on the left in front to the parking.

Preposition Walk

2005-05-23T14:26:00.000-07:00

The paragraph below shows how you can use the patterns we are studying:

Last Saturday, I went for a long walk from my house to the park. It was a nice day, so I decided to walk along the stream that runs by my house. On the way, I went past some children playing catch. One of them threw the ball across a small field, over the heads of the other children, and it fell in the stream. A girl stepped into the stream to get the ball out of the water. After that, I went up the hill and over a bridge. I stopped for a moment and looked down. I could see some ducks under the bridge. I also saw some flowers floating on top of the water. Above me, in the sky, were a few clouds which reflected in the water. When I finally got to the park, I sat down on a bench and rested.

Assignment: Take a walk from the O'Keefe Building to another place on campus. Write as many descriptions as you can telling the directions you took and using prepositions of place. Bring these to the computer lab for your writing assignment on Wednesday.

About the Colors

2005-05-17T12:20:00.000-07:00

My edits in the weblog will be with color text. I will highlight the parts of your work which need improvement. ( Of course, the colors do not include all the possible errors, but it will help you see patterns in your problems. More specific feedback will come when you turn in a printed draft.) The colors will represent a problem area:

Red for punctuation and capitalization (mechanics)
Blue for word problems such as: word choice or word order, missing articles or other missing words, preposition problems (clarity)
Yellow for spelling
Green for grammar: subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, incorrect verb form. run-on sentences, sentence fragments

Remember that your post should begin with your name and the name of the assignment. To be safe, you should do your work in a word-processing format and then copy-paste into the weblog because sometimes the posts get lost or don't publish correctly.