Why Bob Adams is Healthy? (Park, Chul Hyun)

Why Bob Adams is Healthy?

Dear my close friend, Sandra Miller

How are you doing, Susan? We haven’t met for four years; I miss you. How about New York? How’s your study in NewYork University? To tell the truth, I am worried about your health; that’s why I sent you a letter. Two week ago, I heard about you from your uncle who visited here. He told me, “Susan’s health condition is not so good because she is in the lab all the time without caring her health. I’m afraid of her fainting.”

Susan, a health problem is very important to you. I know your enthusiasm that you want to finish your study more than other people, but if your health get bad, is there a meaning, your successful complement of the study? So I want to introduce why our mutual friend, Bob Adams(comma) is healthy? There are several reasons.

First, he exercises regularly. For example, at 6:00 A.M., he plays tennis and on^ weekend he plays baseball with his company fellow. Moreover, he never uses a car for attendance instead of using public transportation; he always walks over and over.

Second, he eat well-balanced meals; especially he like vegetables and fruit instead of meat. He never drink coffee, whiskey and smoke cigarettes. (use OR instead of AND since it is negative)

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Why Emily is healthy

Emily, my classmate, is healthy. There are some factors why she is healthy. First of all, she has swum for nine years. Her major is swimming. So, she can swim very well until now. The next reason is that she doesn't smoking. Also she doesn't like alcholic beverages. When her condition is good, she drinks a little alchol. Third, she has regular habit(use plural). She gets up early every morning. Because she has to go to school on time. And she eats meal same time everyday. Also she goes to bed early. Finally(comma) her personality is very good. She is optimistic and she has simple mind. I want^ be like her.

Why Mel Gibson is healthy.

As you know Mel Gibson, a famous acter, is very hearthy. I'm going to give some of reasons why he is healthy. The first way to make him get good health is a well-balanced meals that he takes everyday. Those are balanced vegetables, fruit, meat, and some other things.

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Ryan Kong(Why GunWoo Is Healthy?)

You know, GunWoo, my classmate, has a good lifestyle and is in very good health. These are several ways to make him keep his good health. First of all, he eats well-balanced meals. He usually eats little meat with some vegetables and fruit. He also exercises regularly in his free time if possible, such as tennis and baseball. In addition, he goes to bed and gets up early every day, so he can have enough sleep to relax. Another reason is he doesn't smoke and drink alcohol. Most of all, he gets along well with his coworkers in his workplace. It is very important thing to have a good relationship with other people. If you understand, try these ways.

Why pepe is healthy

Several Reasons may explain why I am healthy. First of all(comma) I have a well-balanced diet. My favorite foods are steaks and chicken wings, but I always have a salad with them. In my breakfast (comma) I always eat some fruit with milk. Second, I get a lot exercise. I always play tennis, and soccer. I have my car, but I like^walk in the morning before I go to study. After that, I go to work. I work all night. I'm ^bartender, but I never drink beer or any alcohol. Another reason is, I don't have any bad habits, like smoke. In addition, I always go to bed early becouse I need to rest, but sometimes I have a few problems falling asleep.

nice place

Atlanta is a nice place to live.
1. cheapest price of oil
2. not much population
3. good weather

Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are three reasons why it's nice place. First of all, the cheapest price of oil. I've heard about here is a place which has the cheapest price of oil in U.S. I agree about it whenever I go to the gas station. Second, here is not crowd. That means population is good. For example, you can see some places of bad population. There are a lot of hispanic or too many internayional students. In other word, Atlanta is really good enough for people living. Finally, it's great weather here. I specially love the weather of here like my hometown. This is a the most important reason of my recomend. Arlight, let's live here!

Atlanta, Lawrenceville is a nice place to live. (eunhyoung Yoo)

I think that Lawrenceville, Atlanta where I live in, is a nice place to live.
There are several reasons why I think so.
First of all, the scenery of Lawrenceville is good. There are a lot of trees, grass, and flowers. It is very clean and quiet.
Second, the weather is very good. It is clear, light, and mild. I like warm weather very much. So the weather of Atlanta is very nice to me.
In addition, the air is fresh, because Lawrenceville has many trees and few cars. The fresh air is good for our health.
I am a Korean. I want to eat Korean food easily. There are lots of Korean markets and Korean restaurants in Lawrenceville. This fact is pleasing.
The most important reason is that the price is cheap. I and my husband are students, so we can't work in here. We get our parents' help. So we have to save our money as much as possible. The price is importasnt for me. Apartment, food, and oil price are cheaper than Korea.
I think that Lawrenceville whereI live now is a nice place to live.

Comma Splice and Run-on sentences

Use the handout you received in class yesterday to help you correct the following sentences.

1.Georgia Tech has a lot of facilities for athletics, Perimeter College doesn't .
2. Georgia State University has a very large library with many books for research Podunk University has a much smaller library.
3. The Language Institute requires regular attendance,if you miss too many classes you will not pass.
4. After one week, the instructors have a meeting to discuss the level of the students they move students who are too high or too low to a more suitable level.
5. Students can enjoy many activities at Ga Tech while they are studying at the Language Institute there are movies, a gymnasium,concerts, and clubs on campus.

Norma

Actually I'm living in Atlanta, this place es very nice. (You need a main idea sentence)I like (you like what)a lot because(subject) is very safety, you can driver your car, walk trought streetsActually I'm living in Smyrna, Atlanta. This place is very nice. I like it a lot because is very safe, you can driver your car, walk trough streets, and the children can play without feel fear. I live in Post Village; the place is really beautiful, and there you can find much trees, flowers, grass, (conjunction)animals like birds and squirrels. There I can go every afternoon to the gym, or walk around the neighborhood. I love to live in this place because (subject)is very quit, and the most important(subject) is only 15 minutes to Georgia Tech.

Dulith is a nice place to live.

There are a lot of reasons why Duluth is a nice place to live.first of all,there are many restaurants,Mart near in my house.Alos Duluth is clear a town(punctuation) there are new buildilng,apartment

Why Seoul is a nice place to live (Park, chul hyun)

Several reasons might explain why does Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system like( the word with would work here, but not like) one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in South Korea, there is dynamic active internet shopping and developing( you need a noun form to be parallel with internet shopping) so many businesses relying on a cellphone business.

Second Draft

Several reasons might explain why Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. You can find so many people in downtown Seoul at night and it’s not unique in Seoul. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system with one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in Seoul, there is dynamic active internet shopping and so many allied cellphone businesses. You can use the best high-speed internet service in the world for the cheapest price and also choose various kinds of cellphones in Seoul. That’s why I love Seoul.

Atlanta is a nice place to live.

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta have a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta has a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

Yeimi

There are a lot of reasons I like Medellín. Firt of all, it is my hometown. I was born there 27 years ago, and all my family lives there and also my best friends. The weather is special; we don't have seasons, and I think that it is good for the agriculture. There are big mountains around the city. In addition, we have large crops such as potates, beans, bananas and especially coffee. As well as vegetables, our mountains have different kind of flowers in different colors. Our food is very nutritious because it is natural, and people who is living in the farms work hard for that. Also Medellín has the tallest building in Colombia, you can see all the city if you go there. The downtown has many kind of stores, and you can buy something cheaply. The people is really nice and friendly, you can make friends wherever you go. the nigth life is spectacular, there are big nigth clubs and you can choose whatever kind of music do you like to listen or dance. And the most important thing in Medellin is that we are a beautiful people and we love people who visit our city. COME TO MEDELLIN WHEREVER YOU LIKE.....

Ryan Kong(Special Place to live)

Atlanta is a nice place to live for everyone. There are severl reasons why it is nice place to live there. First of all, there is very fresh air.(is has very ...) You can breathe it while you are living there. It can help your health best. Another reason is people who live in Atlanta are very kind. You, moreover, can eat fresh fruit, such as, peaches, grapes, and watermelones ; they are growned in good weather and ground condition. The major reason is Atlanta has good education enviorment. There are very famous colleges and uiversities, like GA Tech and Emory Univ.

Santa Marta, pepe

Several reasons might explain why Santa Marta is a good place to live. First of all, Santa Marta is^ very beautiful city. It has a nice beach which everybody call El rodadero, Tairona park, the castle. Second, I enjoy the night entertainment the city has. Wherever you want, you can find very good discotheques, but La Escollera is the best. Santa Marta has a lot of restaurants, but when you are at the beach, you can eat shrimp. Next, I enjoy the cultural life that Santa Marta offers. Great concerts, and new films are always available. If you want to have a good time, you have to be there.

A historic event

Charles Lindberah flight anlong across the Atlantic Ocean,May 20,1927,at 7:57P.M
he take off from the roosevelt in New York City
He did't have parachute and radio in her airplant.
He flew over Nova Soctia, Newfoundland and Lreland. He flew 3.600 Miles, in 33 hours
On May 21,at 10:22P.M He arrived Le Boureet Airport in Paris, French
100.000 people greeted him. he was first nonstop solotransatlantic flight. New York Tims wrote about him. he recived a medal. he became a national hero and simbol of aviation

Rain cause accident

Jim parks was riding a motorcycle at 3:00AM,on Route 397.The weather was raining. he turned right and he skidded on the parement at Kennedy street.
he saw in front of car,so he avoided the car. his motorcycle was skiding on walkroad and written areport about the accident. he was not injured but a woman said her arm was bruisd
the police took her a woman with general hospital

Charles Lindbergh's historic flight(park, chul hyun)

May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York city for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. He didn’t get a parachute or radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew(preposition) Paris, France. It took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. A mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. The headline was “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.”

[second draft]

May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York City for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. It was a sunny day. To reduce his airplain's weight, he took out a parachute and radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew to Paris, France. I think it was a very exciting flight. That's why he was the first man trying to the transatlantic flight. But I think it was also a boring flight at the same time. Because it took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. Sometimes he was sleepy, and he fell in dangerous moments. But there was a fly, and it bothered him. Thus, he can finished his flight successfully. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. The mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.” It was the headline. He became a real national hero.

Ryan Kong(A Historic Event)

Charles Lindberg planned a historic flight that flew across the Atlantic Ocean. It was the first nonstop solo flight without having any parachute or radio. On May 20, 1927, at 07:57 P.M, he took off at Roosevelt Field, New York City, and flew over many countries and cities, Nova Scotia, New Foundland, and across the Atlantic Ocean. Fianally, on May 21, at 10:22 P.M, he landed at Le Bourset Airport, France. It was 3,600 miles in distance and it took about 33 and half hours.
When he arrived there, there were more than 100,000 of people who congratulated his historic successful flight, the great national hero. At present, he has been remembered as one of the symbol of aviators.

A historic event

1. Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New york city.
2. His plane didn't have any parachutes and radios.
3. He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it take 33hours.
4. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm.
5. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him.
6. He received the medal.
7. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!


Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New York City. His plane didn't have any parachutes or radios.
He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it took 33hours. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him. He received the medal. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!

p.55 A Historic Event

Main idea sentence

==> Charles Lindbergh, who was an american, made the first
nonstop solo transalantic flight from NewYork to Paris.

main idea, a historic event (pepe)

On May 20, 1927 at 7:57, Charles Lindbergh's tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute and a radio. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On may 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.


The first manned flight across the Atlantic Ocean was Charles Lindbergh's. on May 20, 1927 at 7:57 p.m, he tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute or a radio because he didn't want to have a lot weight. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On May 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.

A Historic Event (eun hyoung Yoo)

Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m, It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radioes in his plane.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. He accossed the Atlantic Ocean by flight. It took 33hours and 30 minites. It was 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at le bourget airport which is located Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived(preposition and article) airport, 1000,000 peaple greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. He became articlenew national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, so he became a symbol of aviation. (He wasn't a flight. He was the first to make the flight.)


(Second draft)
Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m. It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radios in his plane, because he had to make the flight's weight lighter.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. It took 33hours and 30 minites for 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at Le Bourget airport which is located in Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived at the airport, 100,000 people greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. His news was reported in The New York Times newspaper. He became a new national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot , so he became a symbol of aviation.


(Main idea)
Charles Lindbergh was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot.

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Rain Causes Accident( Yoo, eun hyoung)

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile(need a prepostion and an article) on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

You Asked, by Yeimi

You asked me what I saw today,
and I said,
"I saw a flower sleeping in the garden,
I saw a girl swearing allegiance,
I saw a boy stealing the flower,
and I saw a flower dying for the love."

You asked me where I have been.
I replied,
"I have been in the white clouds, in the soft clouds, since the dark.
I have felt the wind in my face and
the freedom in my heart for one day."

And then you asked, "What do you hope for?"
I told you that I hoped for many things:
for the impossible love that everyone has,
for the invisible kiss that you never give,
and most of all,
for the dream about you that I hope it will be true.

Rain cause accident ( Park, Chul Hyun)

Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and surprised. First, He turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most of pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person who was his arm bruised. The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

[After Edit]

Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and was surprised. First, he turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person whose arm was bruised.(The previous sentence sould actually be revised anddivided into 2 parts or have some relative pronoun added) The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

motorcycle accident

A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school.

Jim Parks was riding a motorcycle at 3 o'clock on Route 397. It was rainning.
He made right turn on Kennedy Street, and he skidded on wet pavement.
One car ran into his motorcycle. He move the handle to avoid the car. But the road was slippery, so he skidded on wet pavement.
His motorcycle ran into the side walk. Two pedestrians were knocked over. They were so frightened.
The police came after 4 minutes.
The police asked the situation and condition. One women said her arm was bruised. And Jim and one guy were not injured.
The police took her with the General hospital.

*Main idea setence : Jim Parks had an accident.

Rain Cause Accident( Eun Hyoung Yoo)

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automovlie on 397 route. When he was going to school at 3 pm, it was ranning.
His automovile skided on wet pavement on RT397, and Kennedy.
He saw opposite side car comming. So he avoided the car.
His automovile skided at a footway where two person was going past. Suddenly two passenger was shocked, ran away.
At 3: 04 pm, the police arrived.
One passenger reported he didn't injured, but another passenger reported his arm was bruised.
The police man take injured man along the general hospital.


(second draft)
Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

P.43 Make sentence for each pictures

Imagine that you are a reporter for the school newspaper. A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school, and you are reporting it. Use the following pictures to guide you in making notes for the report. Make your inpormation detailed and precise. Add more details if you wish. Work with a partner.

1. Jim Parks was riding a motor-cicle on route 397 in raining on 3o'clock.

2. He's making right-turn for get on the Kennedy Rd.

3. The motor-cicle skided on wet pavement to one car which is parked.

4. He tried to avoid from making accident, but he was knocked over on the sidewalk.
There were two pedestrians got supprise and started running away to survive.

5. On 3:04, a police car figured it out.

6. The police officer is getting inpormation about people's safty.
Two guys are fine, but one women got bruised at her arm.

7. They got off from the police-car at the hospital.


* Main Idea : Especially careful on driving in rainning day.

Where is your paragraph? Is this really the main idea?

accident Edgar (pepe)

This afternoon Jim Park had an accident near to Kennedy Street. At 3:00 p.m, he was riding his motorcycle down 397 route in the snow. At kennedy Street, he turned right, and the car skidded on a patch of ice. First, he hit the car who was passing at the same time. On the side walk, Angela and Jordan were walking(comma) and Jim hit them too, after that, the police arrived, Angela said " I'm not injured, and my arm is bruised" and Jim said "don't worry about it, my mother is a doctor, I will take you at the hospital". Angela and Jim were talking while they walked to the hospital, but Angela felt a lot of pain and Jim took her arm and touch her, she felt different.(You have a run-on sentence here. Add some more punctuation.)

Ryan Kong(Rain Causes Accident)

Yesterday afternoon, Gon, a student of Georgia Tech LI, had a terrible accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy Drive while he was going home. At 3:00 P.M, he was driving down Route 397 alone by motorcycle in the rain. At Kennedy Drive, he turned right, and his motorcycle skidded on wet pavement. First, he hit the car of SoJin, a student of Georgia Tech LI. The car was dented deeply. Then he knocked over a couple of pedestrians, GunWoo and SoYoung, who were walking on the sidewalk. Moments later, at 3:04 P.M, the police arrived. None of them were injured. SoYoung, one of the pedestrians, just told police that her arm was bruised. The police took her to General Hospital for examination. GOOD

Review for Quiz

1. The transition words first, next , finally, lastly are followed by a comma. The transition word then does not need a comma. (page 5)
2. When you have a dependent clause at the beginning of a sentence, you should separate it from the main clause with a comma. ( See page 9)
3. When you have items in a series, use commas to separate them. These items may be words, phrases, or clauses. You don't need a comma if only two items are listed. (page 11)
4. When you use and to join two independent clauses, a comma comes before and unless the clauses are very short. (page 19)
5. Introductory phrases are followed by a comma.(page 39)
6. Appositives are set off by commas. If the appositive is at the end of the sentence, you only need one comma before it. If it is in the middle of the sentence, there must be a comma before and after it. ( page 40)
7. Direct speech is set off by a comma and quotation marks.(page 41)
8. Rules for using the comma with dates, place names and numbers are on page 50.

9. Pages 41 and 52 review changes in verb tense when you change direct quotations to indirect quotations (reported speech).