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take care you'll~~

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Ryan Kong(Classrooms)

There are some differences and similarities between

Exam Review

Study pages 106-108, 116-117, 118-119, 121, 126-128, 130-131, 133, 144

Your exam will be a comparison and contrast composition. You will need to be able to use the patterns we studied in unit 4. Review the sample compositions to get ideas for how to make interesting paragraphs.

Ryan Kong "I Am a Butterfly"

I am a butterfly. It took me a long time to be a beautiful butterfly. Now I have gotten free. I can fly whenever I want and I can go wherever I want. Even though I am a weak thing, I am happy. I love floating in the air and like to suck sweet water from flowers. (Great!--If you can add a few more sentences to this, I will consider publishing it in NEW AND DIFFERENT VOICES lizine.blogspot.com!)

Ryan Kong "Wedding Anniversary Day"

If you can look at this picture and could be given some information.(fragment) This is a picture of GunWoo’s family. As you can see in this picture, they traveled the East Europe in Russia last vacation. On their trip, they stayed at Mr. Pienkowski’s Bed and Breakfast Inn to take some rest. It was very fine day of late summer and their wedding anniversary. When his wife and boy, they both were looking ^green trees, flying birds and blue sky through out the window in their room, he gave her a bundle of flowers. a good start

Family (eunhyoungYoo)

On July 4, 2005, it is not only Independence Day but also Mr. and Mrs. Smiths’ fifth Wedding Memorial day. So Mr. Smith, Mrs. Smith, and Jack who is their son are visiting in Seattle where they met first. They planned to visit in Seattle for 3days, because they want to remember their love.
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On July 4, 2005, it is not only Independence Day but also Mr. and Mrs. Smiths’ fifth wedding anniversary. So Mr. Smith, Mrs. Smith, and Jack who is their son are visiting in Seattle where they met at the first. They planned to visit in Seattle for 3days, because they want to remember their love. Mr. Smith gave her wife flowers for wedding anniversary. So Mrs. Smith was very happy.
The big parade of Independence Day is held. The family wants to see at the outside. But they couldn't. Because they were very tired from traveling. So they decided to see the parade through the window. Mr. Smith's son is very excited. Both Mr. Smith and Mrs. Smith are also very pleased.

In-class writing practice test(park, chul hyun)

My close Russian friend, Mr. Pienkowski went on a wedding celebration trip to Tijuana, Mexico in summer with his family. He sent me a letter with a photo which was taken with his family in front of a window in^Bed and Breakfast Inn at noon. In the photo, his wife had some flowers which could be received from him and it seemed that his sincerity toutched her heart. They both seemed happy with fullness of love, but his son and cat both looked like boring. I think it must be bored to his son because it is not a trip for his son, but for^ wedding celebration.

describe the picture

Mr. Smith's family is enjoying the traveling. The travel is in memory of Mrs. Smith's 33th birthday. Her birthday is August 2th, today. They went^ Florida yesterday. -to be continue........

On July 8, a wonderfull day in New York. The Corleone family are in Mr. Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast inn. The Corleone family are looking at the window becouse the man brought a serenade for his wife. ^Is her birthday, and her daughter

Homework Due Monday

Imagine that you are this butterfly or something else in nature
and describe what you feel, can do, and look like. Try to use some of the vocabulary and patterns you have learned in your writing, reading, and grammar classes this session.
Begin with "I am a..."

In-class writing practice test

This family is in Mr. Pienkowski's Bed and Breakfast Inn. Listen to the questions on the audio and then write a paragraph about the family in this picture. Add a main idea sentence and details to your answers. Use the patterns below in your writing. The questions will help give you ideas. Post your paragraph on this team weblog.
1. could or might be
2. a preposition of place
3. a preposition of time
4. both...and...
5. because or when
6. passive form of a verb

Norma comparison

Sara and Tony both have a car, but their cars a very different, not only in brands, colors, and designs. Sara take cares^ his car, but Tony doesn’t. Their cars are sedan, have car top carrier, are Ford, but, the cars are very different; for example, Tony’s car looks in very bad conditions, the windows and the head light are broken, and the car is dented. Sara’s car looks like new. Use plurals for sedan, carrier, Ford

Tony's car and Sara's car( eunhyoungYoo)

Tony and Sara live in America. The public transportation is not developed well in America. So a person who doesn't have a car cannot move easily.
Tony and Sara have their cars. Both Tony and Sara have cars made by the same company, Ford.
Their cars have car top carriers because they have to load their big luggage. Their cars are sedans which have four wheels.
There are several differences that their cars have. One is color. Tony’s car is silver, but Sara’s car is black. Another is size. Tony’s car is bigger than Sara’s.
The most difference thing is condition; you can see that easily.
Tony’s car is very old. Moreover he didn’t fix his car. The window is cracked. The headlight is broken. Fenders seem to come off. He has to fix the car.
On the contrary, Sara’s car is new. The car is put in good order. Sara is washing her car every day so her car is bright always.
When you see Sara’s car, you will certainly like to ride in her car.

comparing and contrasting(park, chul hyun)

Tony and Sara have moved in Atlanta at the same time. Above all, they need a car. So, they went to a car dealer. Sara had $20,000, but Tony had only $2,000; therefore, Sara bought a new car, but Tony bought a used one. Both of their cars have several similarities; they are made by Ford, the same model, and have a car top carrier. However, at the same time, both of them have several differences; Sara's car is colored by brilliant red, but The painting of Tony's car peeled off completely. Sara's car has a good appearance. In contrast, Tony's car has a bad look; it has broken windows, broken headlights, a dented fender, and so on. But they are both happy to buy their own car.

Eunmi

I have two friends. Their names are Tony and Sara. There are three similarities and differences between them.
^Similiarities are both have same brand. It is ford and it is^same style. It is called sedan. Also they travel a lot. So both have a car top carrier. But now I like to tell there are three differences between them.
^Differences are

comparing & contrasting

There are two friends. One is Tony and the other is Sara. Both have a car. But their cars have some similarities and differences. The one of similarity that both are ^^same company, Ford. And both have a cartop carrier. Tony's car is color of white, big and old thing. But Tony's car is rusty. I think the car is a scrapped car. I wonder how the car is move. And the car's windows, fender, headlights are broken. In addition, he even made an accident yesterday. Maybe, the car cannot run anymore. On the other hand, Sara bought a new car just now. The car is brand new. The car is color of black and smaller than Tony's car. But this is no match for that. She washs her car everyday. She loves her car like pets.
I want^ get in her car. Tony want too, probably.

Ryan Kong(Similarities And Differences)

These are similarities and differences between Tony's and Sara's car. The first similarity is they are made by same company, Ford.^ Second thing is they are sedan style that have 4 doors.^ Last one is they both have cartop carriers, like luggage racks. On the other hand, they have several differences as well. Tony's car seems to be very old. It is dented around the car. Its head lights and car windows are broken. Moreover, the bumper of ^back part is, too. But, Sara's car seems to be^ well-controlled car. (I think you might say a well-maintained car.)

My brother's car. Pepe

I have two brothers, Carlos and Juan Pablo. Both of them have a car. Yesterday, I went to my parent's house. I saw my brothers' car(use plural); therefore, I want to tell about differences between them. Carlos, my older brother, has a nice car. He usually goes to ^car wash because he always wants to see his car clean. Carlos drives very carefully. Therefore, his car doesn't have any scratches. On the other hand, my brother Juan Pablo is messy. He never goes to the car wash. He doesn't care about his car, so his car has broken windows, and broken head lights. I told him, " Please, take care of your car, becouse is very nasty", and he was Ashamed. He swore he is gonna changes his car.

Why Bob Adams Is Healthy(eunhyoungYoo)

Bob Adams has good health. I envy his good health and ^glamorous body. I have never seen his illnesses. I want to learn his secret of his good health.
There are several reasons on Bob's good health.
First of all, he makes regulational life. he wakes up at 7am, and go to bed at 10 pm. He has not only regulational time, but also enought sleeping time. Sleeping is important for us.
Second, he has well balanced meals which includes vegetables, friut, and meat. He never drinks a cup of coffee and alcohol and smokes cigarettes. (with a negative, use or)
Moreover, he works very hard and enjoy it. He gets along well with coworkers and clients. Everyone likes him. He workes with joy.
The most important reason is a regulary exercise. He likes sports very much. His favorite sports are baseball and tenneis. He plays this sports every day afternoon. Exercises are very important for our body.

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Why Bob Adams is Healthy? (Park, Chul Hyun)

Why Bob Adams is Healthy?

Dear my close friend, Sandra Miller

How are you doing, Susan? We haven’t met for four years; I miss you. How about New York? How’s your study in NewYork University? To tell the truth, I am worried about your health; that’s why I sent you a letter. Two week ago, I heard about you from your uncle who visited here. He told me, “Susan’s health condition is not so good because she is in the lab all the time without caring her health. I’m afraid of her fainting.”

Susan, a health problem is very important to you. I know your enthusiasm that you want to finish your study more than other people, but if your health get bad, is there a meaning, your successful complement of the study? So I want to introduce why our mutual friend, Bob Adams(comma) is healthy? There are several reasons.

First, he exercises regularly. For example, at 6:00 A.M., he plays tennis and on^ weekend he plays baseball with his company fellow. Moreover, he never uses a car for attendance instead of using public transportation; he always walks over and over.

Second, he eat well-balanced meals; especially he like vegetables and fruit instead of meat. He never drink coffee, whiskey and smoke cigarettes. (use OR instead of AND since it is negative)

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Why Emily is healthy

Emily, my classmate, is healthy. There are some factors why she is healthy. First of all, she has swum for nine years. Her major is swimming. So, she can swim very well until now. The next reason is that she doesn't smoking. Also she doesn't like alcholic beverages. When her condition is good, she drinks a little alchol. Third, she has regular habit(use plural). She gets up early every morning. Because she has to go to school on time. And she eats meal same time everyday. Also she goes to bed early. Finally(comma) her personality is very good. She is optimistic and she has simple mind. I want^ be like her.

Why Mel Gibson is healthy.

As you know Mel Gibson, a famous acter, is very hearthy. I'm going to give some of reasons why he is healthy. The first way to make him get good health is a well-balanced meals that he takes everyday. Those are balanced vegetables, fruit, meat, and some other things.

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Ryan Kong(Why GunWoo Is Healthy?)

You know, GunWoo, my classmate, has a good lifestyle and is in very good health. These are several ways to make him keep his good health. First of all, he eats well-balanced meals. He usually eats little meat with some vegetables and fruit. He also exercises regularly in his free time if possible, such as tennis and baseball. In addition, he goes to bed and gets up early every day, so he can have enough sleep to relax. Another reason is he doesn't smoke and drink alcohol. Most of all, he gets along well with his coworkers in his workplace. It is very important thing to have a good relationship with other people. If you understand, try these ways.

Why pepe is healthy

Several Reasons may explain why I am healthy. First of all(comma) I have a well-balanced diet. My favorite foods are steaks and chicken wings, but I always have a salad with them. In my breakfast (comma) I always eat some fruit with milk. Second, I get a lot exercise. I always play tennis, and soccer. I have my car, but I like^walk in the morning before I go to study. After that, I go to work. I work all night. I'm ^bartender, but I never drink beer or any alcohol. Another reason is, I don't have any bad habits, like smoke. In addition, I always go to bed early becouse I need to rest, but sometimes I have a few problems falling asleep.

nice place

Atlanta is a nice place to live.
1. cheapest price of oil
2. not much population
3. good weather

Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are three reasons why it's nice place. First of all, the cheapest price of oil. I've heard about here is a place which has the cheapest price of oil in U.S. I agree about it whenever I go to the gas station. Second, here is not crowd. That means population is good. For example, you can see some places of bad population. There are a lot of hispanic or too many internayional students. In other word, Atlanta is really good enough for people living. Finally, it's great weather here. I specially love the weather of here like my hometown. This is a the most important reason of my recomend. Arlight, let's live here!

Atlanta, Lawrenceville is a nice place to live. (eunhyoung Yoo)

I think that Lawrenceville, Atlanta where I live in, is a nice place to live.
There are several reasons why I think so.
First of all, the scenery of Lawrenceville is good. There are a lot of trees, grass, and flowers. It is very clean and quiet.
Second, the weather is very good. It is clear, light, and mild. I like warm weather very much. So the weather of Atlanta is very nice to me.
In addition, the air is fresh, because Lawrenceville has many trees and few cars. The fresh air is good for our health.
I am a Korean. I want to eat Korean food easily. There are lots of Korean markets and Korean restaurants in Lawrenceville. This fact is pleasing.
The most important reason is that the price is cheap. I and my husband are students, so we can't work in here. We get our parents' help. So we have to save our money as much as possible. The price is importasnt for me. Apartment, food, and oil price are cheaper than Korea.
I think that Lawrenceville whereI live now is a nice place to live.

Comma Splice and Run-on sentences

Use the handout you received in class yesterday to help you correct the following sentences.

1.Georgia Tech has a lot of facilities for athletics, Perimeter College doesn't .
2. Georgia State University has a very large library with many books for research Podunk University has a much smaller library.
3. The Language Institute requires regular attendance,if you miss too many classes you will not pass.
4. After one week, the instructors have a meeting to discuss the level of the students they move students who are too high or too low to a more suitable level.
5. Students can enjoy many activities at Ga Tech while they are studying at the Language Institute there are movies, a gymnasium,concerts, and clubs on campus.

Norma

Actually I'm living in Atlanta, this place es very nice. (You need a main idea sentence)I like (you like what)a lot because(subject) is very safety, you can driver your car, walk trought streetsActually I'm living in Smyrna, Atlanta. This place is very nice. I like it a lot because is very safe, you can driver your car, walk trough streets, and the children can play without feel fear. I live in Post Village; the place is really beautiful, and there you can find much trees, flowers, grass, (conjunction)animals like birds and squirrels. There I can go every afternoon to the gym, or walk around the neighborhood. I love to live in this place because (subject)is very quit, and the most important(subject) is only 15 minutes to Georgia Tech.

Dulith is a nice place to live.

There are a lot of reasons why Duluth is a nice place to live.first of all,there are many restaurants,Mart near in my house.Alos Duluth is clear a town(punctuation) there are new buildilng,apartment

Why Seoul is a nice place to live (Park, chul hyun)

Several reasons might explain why does Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system like( the word with would work here, but not like) one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in South Korea, there is dynamic active internet shopping and developing( you need a noun form to be parallel with internet shopping) so many businesses relying on a cellphone business.

Second Draft

Several reasons might explain why Seoul, South Korea, is a good place to live. Above all, there is convenient public transportation. As you can see, Seoul is famous for terrible traffic, but at the same time, there is well-developed public transportation like buses and subways. It’s just like a web, so anyone who wants to go to the destination can use it comfortably. There is, moreover, safe public security. Seoul is one of the safest cities in the world; therefore, anyone can walk streets at night safely without fear. You can find so many people in downtown Seoul at night and it’s not unique in Seoul. But the most important cause is a well-developed networking system with one of the highest speed internet services in the world, nationwide cellphone connecting, and so on; thus, in Seoul, there is dynamic active internet shopping and so many allied cellphone businesses. You can use the best high-speed internet service in the world for the cheapest price and also choose various kinds of cellphones in Seoul. That’s why I love Seoul.

Atlanta is a nice place to live.

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta have a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

I think Atlanta is a nice place to live. There are several factors. First of all, Atlnta has a good environment. For example, the fresh air is good for me. And Atlanta have a sunshine. Seoul, in my contury, is hard to see the sunshine.( problem word order in this sentence )Because my country is limited in area and a lot of high buildings. (fragment)Second, the temperature is moderate. Even though summer is hot, I feel so good. Atlanta also have a clean road. The traffic is not serious. My country have a heavy traffic in every morning. Because The roads is complicated. So we can't drive fast. (fragmentThese are the reason that Atlanta is a good place to live.

Yeimi

There are a lot of reasons I like Medellín. Firt of all, it is my hometown. I was born there 27 years ago, and all my family lives there and also my best friends. The weather is special; we don't have seasons, and I think that it is good for the agriculture. There are big mountains around the city. In addition, we have large crops such as potates, beans, bananas and especially coffee. As well as vegetables, our mountains have different kind of flowers in different colors. Our food is very nutritious because it is natural, and people who is living in the farms work hard for that. Also Medellín has the tallest building in Colombia, you can see all the city if you go there. The downtown has many kind of stores, and you can buy something cheaply. The people is really nice and friendly, you can make friends wherever you go. the nigth life is spectacular, there are big nigth clubs and you can choose whatever kind of music do you like to listen or dance. And the most important thing in Medellin is that we are a beautiful people and we love people who visit our city. COME TO MEDELLIN WHEREVER YOU LIKE.....

Ryan Kong(Special Place to live)

Atlanta is a nice place to live for everyone. There are severl reasons why it is nice place to live there. First of all, there is very fresh air.(is has very ...) You can breathe it while you are living there. It can help your health best. Another reason is people who live in Atlanta are very kind. You, moreover, can eat fresh fruit, such as, peaches, grapes, and watermelones ; they are growned in good weather and ground condition. The major reason is Atlanta has good education enviorment. There are very famous colleges and uiversities, like GA Tech and Emory Univ.

Santa Marta, pepe

Several reasons might explain why Santa Marta is a good place to live. First of all, Santa Marta is^ very beautiful city. It has a nice beach which everybody call El rodadero, Tairona park, the castle. Second, I enjoy the night entertainment the city has. Wherever you want, you can find very good discotheques, but La Escollera is the best. Santa Marta has a lot of restaurants, but when you are at the beach, you can eat shrimp. Next, I enjoy the cultural life that Santa Marta offers. Great concerts, and new films are always available. If you want to have a good time, you have to be there.

A historic event

Charles Lindberah flight anlong across the Atlantic Ocean,May 20,1927,at 7:57P.M
he take off from the roosevelt in New York City
He did't have parachute and radio in her airplant.
He flew over Nova Soctia, Newfoundland and Lreland. He flew 3.600 Miles, in 33 hours
On May 21,at 10:22P.M He arrived Le Boureet Airport in Paris, French
100.000 people greeted him. he was first nonstop solotransatlantic flight. New York Tims wrote about him. he recived a medal. he became a national hero and simbol of aviation

Rain cause accident

Jim parks was riding a motorcycle at 3:00AM,on Route 397.The weather was raining. he turned right and he skidded on the parement at Kennedy street.
he saw in front of car,so he avoided the car. his motorcycle was skiding on walkroad and written areport about the accident. he was not injured but a woman said her arm was bruisd
the police took her a woman with general hospital

Charles Lindbergh's historic flight(park, chul hyun)

May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York city for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. He didn’t get a parachute or radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew(preposition) Paris, France. It took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. A mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. The headline was “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.”

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May 20, 1927, at 7:57 P.M., Charles Lindbergh’s airplane took off from the Roosevelt Field in New York City for the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight. It was a sunny day. To reduce his airplain's weight, he took out a parachute and radio. It flew over Nova Scotia and New Found Land, then flew to Paris, France. I think it was a very exciting flight. That's why he was the first man trying to the transatlantic flight. But I think it was also a boring flight at the same time. Because it took 33 and a half hours for 3,600 miles. Sometimes he was sleepy, and he fell in dangerous moments. But there was a fly, and it bothered him. Thus, he can finished his flight successfully. May 21, at 10:22 P.M., Charles Lindbergh landed at Le Boureet Airport in Paris. There were about 100,000 people greeting him. The mayor of Paris gave him a medal. The following day, he got into the New York Times. “He became a new national hero and the symbol of aviation.” It was the headline. He became a real national hero.

Ryan Kong(A Historic Event)

Charles Lindberg planned a historic flight that flew across the Atlantic Ocean. It was the first nonstop solo flight without having any parachute or radio. On May 20, 1927, at 07:57 P.M, he took off at Roosevelt Field, New York City, and flew over many countries and cities, Nova Scotia, New Foundland, and across the Atlantic Ocean. Fianally, on May 21, at 10:22 P.M, he landed at Le Bourset Airport, France. It was 3,600 miles in distance and it took about 33 and half hours.
When he arrived there, there were more than 100,000 of people who congratulated his historic successful flight, the great national hero. At present, he has been remembered as one of the symbol of aviators.

A historic event

1. Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New york city.
2. His plane didn't have any parachutes and radios.
3. He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it take 33hours.
4. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm.
5. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him.
6. He received the medal.
7. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!


Charles Lindberg, the pilot who made the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, took off on May 20, 1927 , at Roosevelt field of New York City. His plane didn't have any parachutes or radios.
He flew over the Atlantic Ocean from New york and passed Nova Scotia ,New Found Land, Ireland. He flew about 3,600 miles and it took 33hours. He arrived in Le Bouroet Airport in Paris on May 21, 10:22 Pm. There were about 100,000 people and greeted him. He received the medal. The New York Times reported Lindberg became the new national hero and symbol of aviation.
DREAMS COME TRUE~!!

p.55 A Historic Event

Main idea sentence

==> Charles Lindbergh, who was an american, made the first
nonstop solo transalantic flight from NewYork to Paris.

main idea, a historic event (pepe)

On May 20, 1927 at 7:57, Charles Lindbergh's tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute and a radio. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On may 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.


The first manned flight across the Atlantic Ocean was Charles Lindbergh's. on May 20, 1927 at 7:57 p.m, he tookoff in New York City to fly acroos the Atlantic Ocean. He didn't have some items in his plane, like a parachute or a radio because he didn't want to have a lot weight. He flew over Nova Scotia, Newfoundland, andIreland. In 33 hours he flew 3,600 miles. On May 21, at 10:22 p.m he landed at Le Bourget airport in France. 100,000 people were there to greet him. He recived a medal, and he became a national hero and symbol of aviation.

A Historic Event (eun hyoung Yoo)

Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m, It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radioes in his plane.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. He accossed the Atlantic Ocean by flight. It took 33hours and 30 minites. It was 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at le bourget airport which is located Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived(preposition and article) airport, 1000,000 peaple greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. He became articlenew national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic flight, so he became a symbol of aviation. (He wasn't a flight. He was the first to make the flight.)


(Second draft)
Charles Lindbergh, a pilot, was taking off at 7:57 p.m. It was on May 20, 1927.
He did not have any parachutes or radios in his plane, because he had to make the flight's weight lighter.
He flew over New york, Nova scotia, and New foundland. It took 33hours and 30 minites for 3,600 miles.
Lindbergh landed at Le Bourget airport which is located in Paris, France. That time was May 21, 10:22p.m.
When he arrived at the airport, 100,000 people greeted him.
Charles Lindbergh was given a medal. His news was reported in The New York Times newspaper. He became a new national hero.
He was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot , so he became a symbol of aviation.


(Main idea)
Charles Lindbergh was the first nonstop solo transatlantic pilot.

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Rain Causes Accident( Yoo, eun hyoung)

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile(need a prepostion and an article) on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

You Asked, by Yeimi

You asked me what I saw today,
and I said,
"I saw a flower sleeping in the garden,
I saw a girl swearing allegiance,
I saw a boy stealing the flower,
and I saw a flower dying for the love."

You asked me where I have been.
I replied,
"I have been in the white clouds, in the soft clouds, since the dark.
I have felt the wind in my face and
the freedom in my heart for one day."

And then you asked, "What do you hope for?"
I told you that I hoped for many things:
for the impossible love that everyone has,
for the invisible kiss that you never give,
and most of all,
for the dream about you that I hope it will be true.

Rain cause accident ( Park, Chul Hyun)

Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and surprised. First, He turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most of pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person who was his arm bruised. The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

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Yesterday, a fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy. At 3:00 P.M., he was riding a motorbike along the Route 397. At Kennedy Street , he turned right and his motorbike skidded on wet pavement . At that time, he found a car against him and was surprised. First, he turned his handle to the sidewalk quickly. Then he knocked over pedestrians and his motorbike was dented. After moments, the police arrived at 3:04 P.M. The police investigated about injured people, most pedestrians reported that they were not injured except one person whose arm was bruised.(The previous sentence sould actually be revised anddivided into 2 parts or have some relative pronoun added) The police took him to General Hospital for examination.

motorcycle accident

A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school.

Jim Parks was riding a motorcycle at 3 o'clock on Route 397. It was rainning.
He made right turn on Kennedy Street, and he skidded on wet pavement.
One car ran into his motorcycle. He move the handle to avoid the car. But the road was slippery, so he skidded on wet pavement.
His motorcycle ran into the side walk. Two pedestrians were knocked over. They were so frightened.
The police came after 4 minutes.
The police asked the situation and condition. One women said her arm was bruised. And Jim and one guy were not injured.
The police took her with the General hospital.

*Main idea setence : Jim Parks had an accident.

Rain Cause Accident( Eun Hyoung Yoo)

Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automovlie on 397 route. When he was going to school at 3 pm, it was ranning.
His automovile skided on wet pavement on RT397, and Kennedy.
He saw opposite side car comming. So he avoided the car.
His automovile skided at a footway where two person was going past. Suddenly two passenger was shocked, ran away.
At 3: 04 pm, the police arrived.
One passenger reported he didn't injured, but another passenger reported his arm was bruised.
The police man take injured man along the general hospital.


(second draft)
Jim Park, a fellow student, was riding automobile on Route 397. When he was going to school, it was rainning. It was 3 pm.His automobile skided on wet pavement of Rt 397 and Kennedy.He saw opposite side car was comming. So he avoided the car.His automobile was skiding on walkroad. That time Two passengers was walking on the street. They were shocked and avoided jim's automobile.The police man arrived at 3:04 pm.One passenger reported he was not injured, another pasenger reprted his arm was bruised.The police man take the injured man along the general hospital.

P.43 Make sentence for each pictures

Imagine that you are a reporter for the school newspaper. A fellow student, Jim Parks, had an accident near school, and you are reporting it. Use the following pictures to guide you in making notes for the report. Make your inpormation detailed and precise. Add more details if you wish. Work with a partner.

1. Jim Parks was riding a motor-cicle on route 397 in raining on 3o'clock.

2. He's making right-turn for get on the Kennedy Rd.

3. The motor-cicle skided on wet pavement to one car which is parked.

4. He tried to avoid from making accident, but he was knocked over on the sidewalk.
There were two pedestrians got supprise and started running away to survive.

5. On 3:04, a police car figured it out.

6. The police officer is getting inpormation about people's safty.
Two guys are fine, but one women got bruised at her arm.

7. They got off from the police-car at the hospital.


* Main Idea : Especially careful on driving in rainning day.

Where is your paragraph? Is this really the main idea?

accident Edgar (pepe)

This afternoon Jim Park had an accident near to Kennedy Street. At 3:00 p.m, he was riding his motorcycle down 397 route in the snow. At kennedy Street, he turned right, and the car skidded on a patch of ice. First, he hit the car who was passing at the same time. On the side walk, Angela and Jordan were walking(comma) and Jim hit them too, after that, the police arrived, Angela said " I'm not injured, and my arm is bruised" and Jim said "don't worry about it, my mother is a doctor, I will take you at the hospital". Angela and Jim were talking while they walked to the hospital, but Angela felt a lot of pain and Jim took her arm and touch her, she felt different.(You have a run-on sentence here. Add some more punctuation.)

Ryan Kong(Rain Causes Accident)

Yesterday afternoon, Gon, a student of Georgia Tech LI, had a terrible accident near the corner of Route 397 and Kennedy Drive while he was going home. At 3:00 P.M, he was driving down Route 397 alone by motorcycle in the rain. At Kennedy Drive, he turned right, and his motorcycle skidded on wet pavement. First, he hit the car of SoJin, a student of Georgia Tech LI. The car was dented deeply. Then he knocked over a couple of pedestrians, GunWoo and SoYoung, who were walking on the sidewalk. Moments later, at 3:04 P.M, the police arrived. None of them were injured. SoYoung, one of the pedestrians, just told police that her arm was bruised. The police took her to General Hospital for examination. GOOD

Review for Quiz

1. The transition words first, next , finally, lastly are followed by a comma. The transition word then does not need a comma. (page 5)
2. When you have a dependent clause at the beginning of a sentence, you should separate it from the main clause with a comma. ( See page 9)
3. When you have items in a series, use commas to separate them. These items may be words, phrases, or clauses. You don't need a comma if only two items are listed. (page 11)
4. When you use and to join two independent clauses, a comma comes before and unless the clauses are very short. (page 19)
5. Introductory phrases are followed by a comma.(page 39)
6. Appositives are set off by commas. If the appositive is at the end of the sentence, you only need one comma before it. If it is in the middle of the sentence, there must be a comma before and after it. ( page 40)
7. Direct speech is set off by a comma and quotation marks.(page 41)
8. Rules for using the comma with dates, place names and numbers are on page 50.

9. Pages 41 and 52 review changes in verb tense when you change direct quotations to indirect quotations (reported speech).

Yoo, Eun Hyoung (prepositional walk)

I needed a book for toefl. So I bought my toefl book at the book store yesterday.I went out the O'keefe building . I was walking straight one block on Techwood street. That time I saw two students on the bench. I left them talking good-bye. I go on to walk.I turned left on Fifth street. A cloud floated away over the sky.When I acroos the I-75 bridge, I felt tired. So I stopped walking. Then I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I acrossed the street. The bookstore is at the corner of on Fifth street and on Spring street. I went in the bookstore. And I bought my book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.

(second dratf)

I needed a book to study for toefl. I wanted my toefl book as soon as possible. So I went to bookstore and I bought a toefl book.When I finished my classes, I went out the O'keefe building. I was walking streight one block on TechWood street. In that time, I saw two classmates on the bench. I left them talking good-bye. I went on walking.I turned left on Fifth street. I saw that a cloud floated away over the sky.When I across(across is a preposition--you need the word cross, which is the verb) the bridge, I was very tired. So I stopped walking. I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I across the street. the bookstore is at the corner of Fifth street and on Spring street. I went into the bookstore. I bought a toefl book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.


(third draft)
I needed a book to study for TOEFL. I wanted my TOEFL book as soon as possible. So I went to bookstore and I bought a TOEFL book. When I finished my classes, I went out the O'keefe building. I was walking straight one block on Tech Wood street. At that time, I saw two classmates on the bench. I left them saying good-bye. I went on walking. I turned left on Fifth Street. I saw that a cloud floated away over the sky. When I went across the bridge, I was very tired, so I stopped walking. I could see the bookstore in the distance. I went straight one block with all my strength. I went across the street. The bookstore is at the corner of Fifth street and on Spring street. I went into the bookstore. I bought a toefl book. I was so tired, but I was very happy.

Park, chul hyun

I hoped to go to the bookstore that's why I forgot my composition book. But I don't know how to go to the bookstore. So I asked to my spouse, Eun Hyoung. "How can I go to the bookstore?" She said kindly "Oh, it's very easy. In front of O'keefe building, go down the TECHWOOD St. about one block, and you can find the stop signal. Then turn left, and go across the bridge on 5th St. about two block. After then, you can find the bookstore in the corner of northeast."

[Second Draft]
Last day I went to the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE, following my wife's direction. I started from O'keefe building to the bookstore. I walked under the clear blue sky. A slight air on my forehead is fresh and make(remember you are in the past tense) me feel good. Flower's(this is singular, so you need an article) odor filled the air. I walked along the techwood street, and stopped in front of (article)stop signal following my wife's direction. Then I turned left on 5th street and went over a bridge. There is Interstate highway 85, 75 under the bridge. Anyway when I went straight two blocks, I could find the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE on the cornor of northeast. I was so happy that's why the bookstore was very close from O'Keefe Building and very a nice place. There was a many books, large space for resting. It was a best place for reading and filling my intelligent demands. It was also a good place by air-conditioning system. After I entered into the bookstore, I went up the second floor. Then I searched (for)my composition book and found it. It was on the top of the shelves of the cornor of northeast. After I found my book, I made a phone call to my wife with happiness.

[Third Draft]

Yesterday, I went to the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE, following my wife's direction. I started from O'keefe building to the bookstore. I walked under the clear blue sky. A slight air on my forehead was fresh and made me feel good. The flowers' odor filled the air. I walked along the Techwood Street, and stopped in front of the stop signal following my wife's direction. Then I turned left on 5th street and went over a bridge. There is Interstate highway 85, 75 under the bridge. Anyway when I went straight two blocks, I could find the bookstore, the BARNES & NOBLE on the northeast corner. I was so happy because the bookstore was very close from O'Keefe Building and very a nice place. There were many books and a large space for resting. It was the best place for reading and filling my intelligent demands. It was also a good place which has air-conditioning system. After I entered into the bookstore, I went up the second floor. Then I searched for my composition book and found it. It was on the top of the shelves of the northeast corner. After I found my book, I made a phone call to my wife with happiness.

Prepositional Walk ( Gun-woo , Kim )

Two days ago, I took a walk and went to the Book store, Barnes & Nobles, from O'keefe building for doing a classwork.

1. started from O'keefe
2. walk strait on the techwood st.
3. make a left turn when you arrived at first signal.
4. take a 5th street.
5. keep going to see a object building.
6. you can get books.

While I was walking on the bridge, I could see a lot of cars. I felt little scared. It was over side of 85 high way. That feeling made me to walk faster. ^^;;
Finally, I got there and spend a time with my friends with dringking cofee at the Star Bucks.

Ryan Kong(Preposition Walk)

Do You Know How to Get to the Bookstore? How can you get to the bookstore?
These are the directions for you to get there from the O'keefe Building. First, go straight one block on Techwood Drive. You can see the trees and clubs like fraternity along the street. After that, turn left onto Fifth Street. Next, go across the overpass and go straight 2 blocks. While you are walking, you'll be able to see some people who are sitting at the tables in front of restaurants. One of the most popular restaurants for my classmates is Tin Drum. You should try to eat Thai food there if you have not. It's on the right after you go across the overpass. Finally, you can find the bookstore on the right corner. It's next to the cafeteria, Starbucks.

Edgar (pepe) preposition walk

Yesterday, I went from the O'keefe building to Starbucks. I decided to walk there because I wanted a java chips frapucchino. When I left the O'keefe building, I went to Peachstreet, I passed the street and I saw the fraternity's building. Some guys were playing soccer when I went around the fraternity's building. I found 5th Street(use a comma here) and at the light I turned a left and I went over the I- 75 bridge. After that, I went right at the bridge and I found another light. I stopped for a moment and I looked down. Above me was the sun, which was too hot. I still walked straight and I saw a T-Mobile office at my left. At my right (use a comma here)I saw Tin Drum Asian cafe. When I finally got to Starbucks, I sat down with my java chips frapucchino. It Was good.

Andres Preposition

Today after class , I went from the o’keefe building to studies center , I saw many cars park on to sixth street , some ones was park on the left side others in the right side , I took first by sixth street an go down straight ahead until the intersection with the other street(On the right side GT baseball field). I used to ride the Stinger but this time I choose walk across the campus ,I could see some men working , one of them was driving a big machine , it had a large mechanical arm under the roof , and a couple of Mechanical legs in each sides. I saw that for 10 minutes. After that I walked across from some kinds of fraternities(punctuation?) I could see barbecues over the grown and many garbage under them. The next thing that I did , was stop and took air , I was without air ( maybe you mean out of breath) , while I was waiting , I heard sounds of birds , they are above me , on the tree ( Your biggest problem is that you have put too many phrases and clauses together without the proper punctuation or conjunctions. These are called run-on sentences. Go back and divide the long sentences into shorter groups. The ideas should go together logically. Then I will check this again.)

Yeimi Salazar "Preposition Walk"

Every day, I walk from the O'keefe Building to Midtown Station. When my classes are over, I meet with my friends. First, I go downstairs and I see many people sitting around the tables in front of O'keefe Building, they are eating lunche or just taking about the homework for the next day.

Some friends and I go to Starbucks before Midtown Station. We walk on Techwood street just one block, then we turn to the left on 5Th street. Sometimes we take the trolley, but when the weather is good we prefer to walk. We have to take the bridge before we take Tech Square. There are a lot of cars under the bridge because there is I-85 (need punctuation here)also we can see the traffic jam every afternoon because we always take the same way.

Then we walk across the street to the right, there is an Asian Food Restaurant the name is (take this out, add commas, and you will have an appositive)Tim Drum, so many people go there for take lunch. We walk along the Tech Square, there are some stores with big glasses like mirror, it's funny because when we go along the street there are many people looking the mirror while they walking.(run on sentence) Then we pass the traffic light and you can see the Bookstore in the corner. After that, you can see Starbucks, we always go there before to go to Midtown Station, there are some students studying or drinking coffee or smoking..(run on sentence) Next to Starbucks Pizz isa Ray's is delicious go to eat there if you are hungry. After 1 or 2 hours we continue walking to Midtown Station, we go straight to the next traffic light and then we turn on the left on Peachtree street, we walk 2 blocks on the right and in the next parking we must to turn on the right.(run on sentence) Finally we can see the Marta Station on the left in front to the parking.

Preposition Walk

The paragraph below shows how you can use the patterns we are studying:

Last Saturday, I went for a long walk from my house to the park. It was a nice day, so I decided to walk along the stream that runs by my house. On the way, I went past some children playing catch. One of them threw the ball across a small field, over the heads of the other children, and it fell in the stream. A girl stepped into the stream to get the ball out of the water. After that, I went up the hill and over a bridge. I stopped for a moment and looked down. I could see some ducks under the bridge. I also saw some flowers floating on top of the water. Above me, in the sky, were a few clouds which reflected in the water. When I finally got to the park, I sat down on a bench and rested.

Assignment: Take a walk from the O'Keefe Building to another place on campus. Write as many descriptions as you can telling the directions you took and using prepositions of place. Bring these to the computer lab for your writing assignment on Wednesday.

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Do you know these?

Directions: Fill in each blank with the correct past tense and past participle of the verb in parentheses. Click on the ? button to see the correct answer. Click on Reset Test to clear answers.

1. (go)



2.(drive)




3.(fly)


4.(write)


5. (say)


6. ( tell)


7. (take)


8. ( feel)

Prepositions of Location and Direction

Additional information is on page162 in your grammar book and on page 28 of your writing book.

above
across
around
along
at
behind
below
beneath
beside
between
by
in front of
on
on top of
past
through
to
towards
under
upon

Units 1and 2 Comma Review

• The transition words first, next , finally, lastly are followed by a comma. The transition word then does not need a comma. (page 5)
• When you have a dependent clause at the beginning of a sentence, you should separate it from the main clause with a comma. ( See page 9)
• When you have items in a series, use commas to separate them. These items may be words, phrases, or clauses. You don't need a comma if only two items are listed. (page 11)
• When you use and to join two independent clauses, a comma comes before and unless the clauses are very short. (page 19)
• Introductory phrases are followed by a comma.(page 39)
• Appositives are set off by commas. If the appositive is at the end of the sentence, you only need one comma before it. If it is in the middle of the sentence, there must be a comma before and after it. ( page 40)
• Direct speech is set off by a comma and quotation marks.(page 41)
• Rules for using the comma with dates, place names and numbers are on page 50.